Very deep. I enjoyed the way you started it.

*gasp* My gosh, what a wonderful poem. The imagery is amazing! This one in particular really caught my attention, and touched me. I could only hope to ever create something half as good as this. *salutes almighty poet* Beautiful, dahling. Keep at it!

i thought that it was beautiful. i interpreted it in several different ways which made it unique and spectacular ;)
awesome.

I already told you how much I love this poem, but I thought I'd drop a review anyway, telling you how I'm basking in your amazing words. And ok, that was a little lame, but it's the truth.

Disturbing. Unbelievable. Superb.
You did an awesome job with this...I like your choice of words
"Black cherry candy pavement"
"soft hair gleaming with impatience"
"lacey luscious lady birds sang out their seductions"
I like how it's not so straightforward...you actually have to think about it, process it.
You've got talent.

*speachless*...wow...
this is an amazing piece, the imagery, the flow, the message. So powerful, the depth it has goes so far.
Outstanding.
-nix-

Bianca... I remember reading the proto-poem of this! Very nice, you definitely sharped it up. I love line XII, "and the lacey luscious lady birds sang out their seductions..." That is what I call poetry. I still can't get over that you dumped rhymes, but I'm dealing with it...