Yeah, it is me again. Still like the way you write! You use some really cool pictures. Like the pin… no… I love the pin it is great symbol. However, the story in itself is lacking. I don't know; the idea is fine but it seems a bit superficial. You have a talent for describing, why not use it. Tell us more about this people... Am I making any sense?

Is this it? Kat is REALLY shallow, and people who hate preps usually aren't so shallow. The guy doesn't seem like a complete prep to me, and you REALLY need to say something about his name, where he's from, anything useful.