nice metaphor.. very true

Unusual and dusky. Loved the taste-descriptions here...I know full well how difficult it is to replicate something that complicated, since words in our language for taste are few and far between. Excellent subtlety in the metaphor here, too-I didn't need the author note to tell me what you were talking about, but you didn't ruin the poem with blatant explanations, either. Definitely appreciated that.

Oh, man. You know how much I love this poem, especially because it applies/applied to me!

Very interesting. You pulled it off well.
It's very paradoxical-but such is life. - that is not a complaint. :-)

like back of teh throat thingee burn. nice!

I love this poem, just how well the imagery is done with the metaphore. Awesome job!

I am glad you used this image. when i first tried it i wasn't sure it would work and thought it might end up just being really cheesy, but fortunately that wasn't the end result!
You've created sthg beautifully unique in your reminiscence and use of imagery. I think we've proved that grapes and wine are a good motif!
the conversationality in this is particularly appealing, like it was mentioned in another review, it does make it feel like two old friends reminiscing. the descriptions of the different, contrasting and intermingling flavours is pretty, i liked the "Pinched cheeks, squinted eyes-/ anything to dull the taste".
You put the poem into perspective with the verse "Even though years have passed" and give it that sense of old (but not ancient) and well-remembered days.
the last verse does depart from the conversational tone, but it doesn't detract in any way because it grounds the poem and provides a solid ending.
lovely.
mezzie

*claps hands* Wow, that was a fabulous poem. I'm in awe of your creativity; I never would of thought of using vineyards as an metaphor. This is a true work of art.

I love the whole concept of the poem..Well done...
When each grape a memory
Had a taste in its own…
I especially love those lines.
* and Jaxie is such a cool name..Is it short for something??

I like this so much until the very last stanza. Up to then, it seems less like you're talking to the reader than reminiscing with an old friend... "remember the (good old) days (when we were) wandering through the vineyard (?)" with the () parts understood. Then it goes all moralish at the end...
Still...you bend the words perfectly and I love it. Beautiful job.

beautiful imagery! perhaps expand on the wine part?? twould be pretty...ier

very nifty...the added verses helped it a lot.
~Tigress

my mouth is hanging open. i'm insanely jealous of your power over words...great poem :-D