it was good. you related well to other people i think. a little gruesome, but good. i really like the end of it.

1) you need to work on formatting you can add more to a poem by using seperater lines for sentences or phrases or putting words that you want to stress by themselves on a in
2) nice imagery, a little gory, It's kinda difficult to see how you got from drowning on tears to rotten organs though.
Keep up the good work.

Putrid flesh is my favourite metaphor. I like it. I think you could take it further. Elaborate on the pain/decay affiliation. Throw in some maggots and the like.

wow your choice of words are very impressive!
summerdazed