To keep it short, as I'm sure my constant reviewing is getting irritating... I liked it a lot. I'd love to paint this, I think I will for my fourth mural, thank you for the inspiration.

with all due respect,Faerie Energy

Nice imagery and great word choice. I liked this poem, and I like your name too. Nice job here.

loved it, great job. There were more elements of the situation thta you could have added to make it even more effective, but otherwise it was wonderful. Gj

This is amazing. The imagery is very good, makes you feel like you're in the poem. Scary. One thing: is it supposed to be 'And last to breath' or 'At last to breath'? I think 'at last' makes more sense.

I've heard drowning is one of the worst ways to go...and this poem certainly exemplifies that fact. Very nice!