The kids were going to kill each other? And then someone just suggested that the fight was stupid and they forgot it all? Wow. Well I guess that if you move beyond the fact that it was unreal--several teenagers conveniently having access to guns, Julian being able to get away with stabbing Marques, I mean I think he would press charges, oh and Nora hiring hitmen-- it wasn't that bad. But I had a hard time suspending reality that far. I did follow this story to the end though, so I guess that says something.

LOL-this chapter had me crackin up. Sasha did nothin but get told off this whole episode. "Girl, you are nothing special w/ your short ** hair."-I almost fell out my chair at that part. “But you saw Julian and fell for him. Just shut up.”-I dunno y I laughed at that, I jus did. Anywayz, yeah, the more I read this the more I think the remake is gonna be real good cuz this one is tight except for sum grammar mistakez and a lil too graphic sex scenes-lol-but anywayz, itz all good,
David

I updated my story

Um... I was just looking for a story so I could tell you that my story isn't over, and then I read this one and... DAMN! A little to sexual, if that's possible

I liked this chapter. It was pretty good. All I'd suggest is to check once more for grammar, but at the same rate I need to do that with my work as well. I shall review more of this when I have the time. But good start.

i keep reading this story in hopes that it will improve. at least everything isn't so dramatic anymore. marques must get a lot of money to be able to buy a sapphire ring. i wouldn't let my new boyfriend give me a sapphire ring although clearly marques is in the money...

haha i guess that's me. yeah this was definitely much better. still some improvements necessary. i mean, would tucker and the others let nora be beaten up? do they dislike her that much? and i would be very upset if i had bruises all over my face. nora should be filing some sort of charges, not just laughing it off with her sister. so some parts of this are still unrealistic, but it's better

once again, it's not a nursery home. i think that in an attempt to create a town, you put too many characters and you're having a hard time developing them all. maybe you should change your summary b/c these people's lives hardly seem carefree. in fact i think there's too much drama. and how old are most of these kids? why is it that none of them seem to have morals?

the divorce was finalized in a few days? i'm pretty sure that only a few days lapsed between this episode and the last one. it's not "daises." i could ignore that but it's very difficult to take an author seriously when he talks about sending an adult to a "nursery home."

... You should make other characters do stuff. This is pretty dramatic so far.

Chelsea is weird, but I like her... Her brother is also weird...
“Okay, I feel so stupid right now.” Rhonda said.
Thats' the finniest line I saw in this episode. *Laughs* ^^;

i think that all the desciptions of people's clothes are irrelevant. you still have several grammatical errors which could probably be fixed with proofreading. is sasha supposed to be stupid? after everything that's happened, she still got together with julian? hmm...

To my opinion, this story is good. It's very dramatic and problems are going on between the characters. Forget what the flamer guy said, this was good.

Oh my God; that's so sad! How could Whitney's mother say such stuff?! Stupid fat **... *giggle*
I hope Vance becomes a good boy someday. ^_~;

What is this? You open with a description of who's wearing what and some extremely bad dialogue? How old are you, like eight? This sucks.