Hm... I don't know, it's not bad, but there's just something about it that I can't quite pinpoint, and yet it irks me. Could just be the style in general, in which case it's my fault, so I'm sorry for the lukewarm review... I'll go look at some of your other work now to try and either figure out what it is I don't like, or make up for not being positive on this one.
~Taylor