Tintillatingly sizzling; drizzling innuendos and picadillos for the dainty connoisseur. ¡Wonderful, I'm turning the AC down 10 degrees and throwing off the blankets! m

this poem *is* hot! i think a few kids could pick up on it, but it's still tasteful. I'm going to have to try reading some of your fiction when I've got more time. You must have a zillion words archived! Very prolific!

um... i think a kid could pretty well understand what this was about... this is well written though, and very descriptive.

I think for the first time I am speachless about a review sent to me. speachless in a bad way. "there are so many typos, spelling errors, and grammar errors that I just can't get through the first chapter" I think that wasnt exactly true on your part. i think you were basically trying to express a point. so why not say 'there are a lot of grammatical errors'? because that would be more truthful than the statement you have said. and the thing about not 'I just can't get through the first chapter.' there was a study done saying that no matter what the word is if the first and last letters are put in the correct order people can understand what the word is with ease. I apreciate your offer of being my beta but I refuse it because if you 'can't get through the first chapter' then i'm not going to make you. thanks for the review...
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*Beautiful* imagery... very HOT!

beautiful.

awesome, imagery is provocative(sp?)

Fun. I like the last line of the first paragraph - "Riddle, rhythm, high tide". There's something about that particular line that's really eye-catching and entrancing, but I'm not sure what. Hmm.
I like this poem a lot overall. Very charming.