amazing!

That was so sweet!
I'm glad she finally let him into her life. I don't think she'll get hurt by him. He's cool.

Great Story,
HBW or Julia E*

Really loved this story :)
At first Brayden annoyed me but she grew on me and I can't help but love her. And Matt is so sweet ^__^ My favourite character has to be Alli though because she's so quirky and awesome :)

Well done,
Fatty

wow Brayden was annoying this chapter. i don't understand what's wrong with her life. why is she so bitter? jeez.
-zozo

N64 huh? very old school! haha
but seriously, i'm really excited about this story. Brayden's cynical and condescending demeanor can be a little irritating, but it's very funny as well. i'm going to go on and read some more!
-zozo

Just so you know. Your story's fantastic.

I was skeptical in the beginning. I could hardly get over your MC's attitude...and I admit, I stopped reading. But I returned soon, and after getting past the first chapter, I...lightened up. And so did the story. It kept its deeper elements, namely your MC getting over that someone could possibly love her, but the sweetness factor overpowered in a story I was sure would be dripping with angst. You kept the balance, and it was great.

The Ginger Ale Girl is now one of my favorite MCs, and the Boy with Blue Hair will forever own a sliver of my heart.

Congratulations. :) You wrote something swell.

Jules

Hello.
I was randomly flicking through the pages of completed stories on this site and I came across yours.

I like your writing style. It's clean and neat. You do a good job of capturing the characters mindset and then transposing it across the entire story. I like your description of your characters... the way you portray the siblings and the grandmother really made me feel as if they were real people and not just plot devices.

I do have to say that I find Brayden slight obnoxious though and I hope that through whatever romance she eventually finds... she lightens up. She has no reason to be so cynical, she is obviously a well of girl living in a relatively loving family. Though, I understand the annoyance of living around obnoxious superficial highschoolers, some of her ramblings get a bit on the annoying side herself.
Ex.
Her liking music that is only not well known? Just as bad as people who like music who is well known. Like music because you like it. Not other peoples positive or negative reactions.

I like her mostly, just her constant degradation of all the other characters around her makes her seem stuck up.

But, I think she is a good base line, she has a lot of potential for character growth since as a start she is already, obviously, intelligent and observant... maybe the influence of events and other characters can bring some optimism in her world.
I shall keep reading and find out!

Aw wow - this story is awesome.

Not sure if accuracy matters to you or not, but in case it does, this part "“How many times a Jehovah’s Witness has come to your door with a freaky serene smile on their face telling you that you’re doomed to hell?”" wouldn't be accurate seeing as Jehovah's Witnesses don't believe in hell. They believe that when someone dies that they simply cease to exist and don't go to heaven OR hell. I've researched a lot of religions which is why I know that random fact...lol. Just thought I'd share.

This has always been the funniest story on FictionPress. I remember reading it years ago when it first came out. (I had a diff. SN then) I'm re-reading it now for the first time since...'05 probably. Has me cracking every other line. Brayden is classic. This would be a great movie, in the right hands of course.

great story :)
speaking of which, "opa" is the german word for grandfather, in russian its "Dedushka"...russian is one of my native languages :D just thought i'd tell ya that

1. I really like your story thus far it is a clever invention of cynical wit
2. You write ALOT and for that you deserve a round of applause from all Leauge of Writers Who Lack The Attention Span To Write Really Long Stories And Stick With Them
3. The little scene where Matt mirrors Brayden's whole cementray talk thing was quite touching. It was a nice relief.
4 I like your work thus far Thanks!

I love this story! I can't believe it's over already! Keep Writing

The whole story itself was fairly good. It had a great sense in keeping a person’s attention. And although Brayden’s personality could be quite negative at times, I’m glad she has finally taking that risk.

The only thing that I questioned was the genre, you held it under humor- although I agree there were little bubbly moments, I would have still put it in romance.

I loved this story...My favorite part about the whole story, was how Brayden's character didn't falter and become someone else. You are a very good author, and I deeply encourage you to write more, because from this story alone, you one of the few authors now that don't give in to the average story line.

I hope you have pleasure in writing more stories and that they are all as good as this one.