As far as CC goes, possibly have more in terms of what's happening? Like... feelings. Emotions. Interactions. But I agree with another viewer, and really like the lines "I'm crying, you're crying, heaven's crying too."

Peace, hearts and cheers.

Jess

aw

this is great. i love the line "im crying your crying and heaven's crying too". this is lovely

Ouch. It does hurt. This is wonderfully written.

This is a great poem. I love the part "heaven's crying too," It really makes the phrase much deeper. The only thing I would say is that the last stanza kind of switches speakers, and it doesn't quite fit in. other than that, great poem, and great rhyming once again.

aw so sad...so sweet...

Aww it almost made me cry, its reminding me of whats going to happen with me and my baby when I go to college. Very touching