damn i like your work the flow is incredible.
mezzie

hey...that was great! yeah i dunno what it's really about either, but it's about something good! keep writing totally...ya know what, you would be good at writing raps...LOL! you should be a rapper! lol...IMAO! i'll join! lots of love~SporT

Nice. I like the doubting moon.

Hmm, the only word I kind find for this poem is hyper. Funny and interesting, but still very hyper.

This is EXACTLY how you talk sometimes. Except much, much, much more profound.
Only difficulty is "disintegration/where I shall burst..." It sounds a bit too formal, maybe just break off and start a new sentence "disentegration/I'll burst..." And "open arms, or small pieces of them" might make more of an impact if you said "a thousand small pieces" two lines above. Just a few little things...overall, this was really great.