Wow this is super-good! Continue, please!
-Alareic-
PS. I've got a story, The Third Day. Can you review please? Thanks!!

wowow, nice!
You think you can't do sensory detail that well, but me thinks j00 can. =P
I sorta think you should have described the cave though, just to set the setting better. reat besides that little fact! n.n