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teepotuk 2008-05-09 ch 43,	abuseI really loved this stroy its amazing. Please write a sequel.
the-truth-is-verity 2008-04-11 ch 43,	abuseaw! this is such a beautiful, beautiful story :) i cried when Connor's brother died. but anyway, i truly loved this story, and you should be very proud of your work :) keep on writing :)
Green Eyed Pixie 2008-03-16 ch 43,	abuseaw lovely story. i really liked how both the characters grew into themselves apart and the found each other again! but still loved each other, so sweet. i hope you write more stories.
Liviania 2007-11-19 ch 43,	abuseSuch an uplifting ending! Really sweet, real story, I had a great time reading it. Livi
caramel blazers 2007-07-27 ch 43,	abuseThis is one of the best slash stories that I have read on this site. I really like the way that you progressed the characters in the first part of this story, of their discovery, their realisation - it was just fantastic. I didn't really like the gap year that they were apart, and it wasn't just because they were apart but they seemed to just throw everything that they wanted away, Connor acted incredibly wise to stay with his brothers and sisters which i dont really think is indicative of his age and his past behaviours- he is always pushing for more, but never truly understands the implication of this, so in this way he is naive. I wish this part was explored a bit more. Another thing that didn't seem to fit in, was at the beginning the characters were so strong and so driven, Greg was so adamant about following into his fathers footsteps but there is something that I just can't dismiss. I think if something like this scenario was to unfold in a realistic way, they would have parted and not met up for the next 10 years or so. I have nothing against the characters, in fact I think that they are awesome!! But I don't think that even at this conclusion of the story that they don't have the strength and maturity to move beyond this situation. That perhaps they would achieve what were expected to do, then come back knowing that they have experienced it and have no regrets. Greg and Connor seem to be very contented yet, but technically they aren't even legal age to drink, and have just finished high school so how are they able to manage a good relationship for the rest of their lives. There are just some events that would have to transpire, before they would be able to effectively manage this. Maybe instead, the first half of this story would be suited to a second part which would depict them like 5-10 years later, where they are dealing with everything, out in the real world and be able to distinguish the idealised fantasy boyhood/first love portions from something that is more realistically sustianable. I hope that you don't think that this is a scathing review, I really liked this story and especially story of first love between Greg and Connor and this story is incredible. Probably the reason why I am commenting like this because I read it all at once but the story is very sweet, and the love that the boys first falling in love is so sweet and innocent and was a pleasure to read.
xfail 2007-07-22 ch 1,	abuseI just have to say that I absolutely loved this. I think your writing style is wonderful, your characters are all easy to relate to and like, and your plot was believable. Most of all, it was touching! This is definately one of the best things I have ever read on this website and I will never forget it. Good job!
Back of Beyond 2007-05-28 ch 43,	abuseAbsoloutely amazing story! Bit gutted that you never wrote a sequel though...:(
ddz008 2007-05-13 ch 43,	abuseGreat story! It was such a sweet ending and I'm happy they finally had their happy ending. I started reading this story more or less since you started, I think that my first review was for chapter 14. I don't know why I never saw this last two chapters but I'm so glad I finally found this story again. It was amazing to realize that I haven't forgotten the plot XD Thanks for sharing such a wonderful story with us! Conner and Greg deserved to be happy and together! :)
The Intelligent Designer 2007-04-10 ch 43,	abuseIt was beautiful. I loved every minute of the story. The characters were real and understandable, there love was strong and wonderful. The lyrics were well chosen and relevant. Fanatastic.
Cokii 2007-04-05 ch 1,	abuseLove ya!
CaramelMacchiato 2007-04-03 ch 43,	abuseI'll be honest with you – I have no idea where to begin. I guess my main question is: how on earth did you manage to make this fic so perfect? I read this fic over 2 days and, I must admit, I have never been more emotionally involved with a fic as I was with this one. I never – and I mean never – read fics about teenagers, because, through experience, I have come to associate them with boring, predictable mundaneness. What drew me to your fic was the fact that it's slash-oriented, and before this one I'd never read a slash fic that wasn't fan-fiction. Of course, all this gushing doesn't mean that I didn't find anything that couldn't be improved. As I warned you, I will be honest: I don't think this story is any state to be published as it is, but once tidied up it has every right to be a bestseller. Some bits of dialogue are a bit stale, other times you just over-do emotions a little; but I don't think any of my criticisms are anything major. What I believe makes this fic so damn great and extraordinary is the way you managed to portray people as people: real, living, perfectly imperfect and at times even shocking, human beings. Your boys were amazingly realistic and very interesting, because they and their emotions were so vivid and poignant. In short, pretty much everything seemed SO REAL! Also, this story definitely appeals more to the romantics among us than anyone else, because it so deftly captures the essence of the boys' relationship and, as somebody else wrote in their review, makes one believe that true love could exist. I want to thank you for keeping this hope alive, and congratulate you from the bottom of my heart, for this fic is truly an accomplishment. I don't think I have said everything that I wanted to say, and I'm sure I will remember plenty more later, but this will have to do in the meantime. I am going to borrow “At Swim, Two Boys” from the public library tomorrow, because by now I shall trust anything you recommend. If I ever have the time to sit down and properly review each chapter of this fic, you can be sure I will do it. Please remind me if I forget.
diebyownhands 2006-06-22 ch 43,	abuseWonderful story, sweet touching and angsty everything in just the right measure. I will be corny and say this is something that makes you think maybe true love is real.
Dezzire 2006-05-30 ch 43,	abuseMarry me. Wow. Simply incredible. Each one of your characters is beautifully fleshed out. And the plot twists? It's 2:15am and I have yet to start studying for my physics test, which will take place in a few hours. However, sometimes you tell instead of showing, or restate things. For example: "My jaw nearly dropped to the floor when I saw the gorgeous mass of powerful machinery that was Greg’s car." We know it's Greg's car, so you don't need to tack that on. Other than that, keep writing! This is a touching, lifelike story that reduced me to tears and laughter, sometimes at the same time.
Hokit 2006-04-15 ch 43,	abuseWow! My eyes are red and puffy from reading this at 3 in the morning, but it was well worth the effort. I really admire writers who have the discipline to set aside time to not only share their work with others, but to actually go back and edit it as well. Thank you very much for writing this story. I'll be looking forward to your next installment!
FFITM 2006-01-05 ch 43, anon.	abuseLove the story, very tasteful with a well rounded sense of emotional description. Crits? Firstly, your sense of pace was a little weird though, I understand that you cannot write out every day, but some of your transitions from, say, the school year to the summer, were much too vast to go without a paragraph-sized transition. Try summing up some fake events or some slight reminiscence, it will add wonders to the style. If you need examples, I've found that J.K Rowling, whose writing does not usually impress me, does good transitions. Secondly, your word choice is excellent in some ways, but at times I couldn't help but notice that you repeated some things far too often. The end of chapter 7 (the last line) used the word night three times. Not a huge mistake, but it takes a little bit away. Please don't take these crits as a flame, I love the story, and you are certainly a talented writer. I'm just trying to give an actually usefull review. - FFITM

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