O, this is a unique view! A lot of poems about spring are about flowers and sun. But this makes me think of the earth emerging once more from winter, what with the shivering sky and the fields shot with silver (snow? ice?) and the ripple of lark song breaking through everything. Excellent point of view.

It's good. Quite effective. Keep writing. I love the stuff you do.
Trins x

If I were you I would try short, long, short as a formate for Hiaku. It is good if you want to express somthing in Haiku form but don't want the restriction or the challenge of 5 7 5.

This is very pretty. Striking imagery. :)
Keep it up!
~Joyce Reid

This is beautiful... I love the last line...

Very good. Beats my efforts, my jelousy haiku is more than felt!
Keep writing.

not bad for a first attempt. very well written.

This is really beautiful. It is very dense, there is so much meaning in every word, and you combine many images in these few lines, for instance the "ripple" adds the idea of flowing water to the lark song. I love the idea of the sky shivering, it expresses the vitality of spring in this case. Well done.

This is too a good haiku. I've tried to write a few haikus and they all turned out pretty bad. They kind of confuse me. Well just to be frank, I love it. Continue the good work. T.T.F.N.

Hm. Spring where I am right now is hot and humid. I think the weather forgot what season it was supposed to be.

Your first Haiku? That was pretty darn good, darlin'! M... imagery. I wonder, do you ever dabble in songwriting? I think you'd be rather adept at that.

Cool poem. You got a lot of meaning into few words. Great job. Keep writting.

Hey, this is really lovely! There is definitely beauty in understated elegance. Thank you for sharing it with us. :)

Pretty. Way better than my first attempt at a haiku, that's for sure. Then again, haikus aren't really my fav. form of poetry to write anyway...
~Faith, Hope and Love

you have a talent for haikus i could never do such a thing. so flowing! and so short and sweet. woah. c merveilleux
sarah.