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| Her Wishing Well 2007-05-07 ch 1,  | abuseGreat and cute the repetition of the heart beats works really well. I love how you ended it. |
| Zephyr Zaelza 2005-06-25 ch 1, | abuseOu so cute lol. It's short, but that's ok, sometimes a lot of words just ruins the effect. Great job! -Zephyr Zaelza |
| Chris Taylor 2005-03-20 ch 1, | abusethat's the story? i know you said short story, but THAT short? meaningful, but still, it coulda used a few more lines, or at least a few moe words :P. lol. Peace and Chicken Grease |
| Violet Blues 2005-02-11 ch 1, | abuseAw! This is so CUTE! I love it. |
| emergency goose situation 2004-11-06 ch 1, | abuseA STORY! OMG A STORY! I TOTALLY DIDN'T KNOW THERE WAS A STORY HERE! ACK I LOVE IT! IT'S SO CUTE AND SWEET AND ACK A STORY! Ok, I'm calm. See? I knew you'd be good at stories! Write more, okay? |
| nesy 2004-09-14 ch 1, | abuseIt made me smile...you were right, it was quite cute. I really find it's beautiful. |
| Dakota Alexus 2004-08-26 ch 1, | abusethis is cute story. |
| crybabekrizz 2004-07-18 ch 1, | abusethis is so cute! ;) |
| Alexz Lynn 2004-07-15 ch 1, | abuseAw, Very cute! You said this was half true, half fantasy. Was him saying "hi" the fantasy? ^^Keep Writin'^^ ~ Alexz Lynn |
| KaseyLovesNoOne 2004-06-20 ch 1, | abuseAww it's so cute... You're awsome at writing! |
| sheZadey 2004-06-14 ch 1, | abuseaw- NICE!! i love it. i like the repetition and then change. this is an awesome poem |
| philoslove 2004-06-13 ch 1, | abuseCute and sweet! And have I mentioned very suspenseful? Great work! |
| SoccerGal 2004-06-07 ch 1, | abuseAW! I loved it! That was awesome. |
| LancerDragoon 2004-05-23 ch 1, | abuseI think that works more like a poem, but I suppose the sentences were too long to classify it as such. Still, the effect was the same and that's not saying it's not good; if anything, it was, indeed, cute. |
| Steel Winged Angel 2004-05-13 ch 1, | abuseooh..my heart skips a beat or two...or three. This is certainly what I would do if a guy followed me like that. Especially if he had blue eyes. Blue eyes make me m-e-elt. *grins* I like this...so suspensful. |