wow, i really like it, great job, u should consider writing a melody to it, this piece definatly has song potential
brendz

great poem!
i love the way it flows.
good job!

This could definately be a song. I really like the chorus, espcialy this.
"Now I'm sarching for the answers
At the bottom of a bottle
But I'm getting nowhere
My life feels swallowed"
That was a really cool line.
-Cole-
R&R some of my stuff if you will...