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| random_reviewer 2005-05-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow! Wonderfully rich descriptions, beautiful imagery. Keep up the good work! It was really a surprise to me when his blade turned out broken, too. ^_^-KTH |
| SwordoftheKing 2005-03-21 ch 2,  | abuseWoah... MAJOR plot twist, there. Your story is awsome! I would remind you to check and make sure that your subjects and verbs agree, and that your tenses (past/present/future) don't change around. Other than that it was great! Please update soon! |
| NanakiClaws 2005-01-06 ch 2, anon. | abuseI just read the Chapter one. But I like it very much! Good work! |
| Rizwan 2004-12-15 ch 2, anon. | abuseLooks like a good story.The descriptions could do a little bit more working on but overall i think it is great.Cant wait for the next chapter. |
| Conrath 2004-11-28 ch 2, | abuseAHH, please write more... |
| chrisu 2004-07-31 ch 1, | abusePersonally, it is veyr good. A sequel would be a good idea and the descriptions are very detailed. Good job! Rating: 8/10 |
| ladylore 2004-07-05 ch 1, | abuseBrilliant work! |
| AndrikTheUnsmiling 2004-05-30 ch 2, | abuseGreat story so far. Quiet a twist that Arrow recived a broken sword. Keep up the good work. |
| Lomiel 2004-05-25 ch 2, | abuseMagnificent. I am regretfully ignorant of the titles, names, and much of the kind of culture you refer to, but this was still an amazing beginning. Honestly, despite having read the chapter title, I was shocked when the blade came out broken. As Arrow has already formed a bond with this sword, I hope that this is somehow resolved in future chapters. Your descriptions are very poetic and rich, though I was confused a few times in your description of the elders (paragraph 17). I found very few punctuation or grammatical errors. Wonderful work. Happy writing, Shimoyo Lomiel |
| mike 2004-05-19 ch 2, anon. | abuseI'd sign in but i forgot my password anyway I really like this story and hope you write more sometime...i won't be able to read it for another 20 days but I'll be able to eventually |
| Elianor 2004-05-06 ch 1, | abuseIt's very nice... And it's the kind of story I've been ransacking bookshops for. Wuxia tales in English. Wondeful. Anyway, I love the way you've incorporated words like 'Shifu' and 'Zhangmen', although perhaps, for those who don't read such wuxia novels, you might want to present a translation? Just a thought. And just wondering, but is there a reason why the second chapter bears a striking resemblance to the first? No offense meant, just a very curious reader. |