 lady luck 2005-12-23 . chapter 1 A drabble is exactly 100 words no more no less. Some are more lax and are 200 words {double drabble} but 99% of drabbles are only 100 words. People just don't know the real definition. This is not a drabble. |
 Phaze 2004-06-30 . chapter 1Wow, very well put and powerful. I think a lot of people have felt these types of emotions, and even though I found this story with a random search, I am so glad I did. You are a talented young writer who shares her emotions very well. I myself am going through a milder version of what this charecter is facing, so I can relate. Thank you for sharing. |
 StarQuality 2004-04-30 . chapter 1Wow, that was really powerful :-)
Thank you for reviewing my fic, I'm glad I read yours! |
 rollymc123 2004-04-09 . chapter 1Thank you for reviewing my story, and please excuse the delay in returning the favor. I try to be thorough, so bear with me if this review becomes long.
First off, you have an amazing talent with writing the stream of consciousness, meaning a flow of thoughts without interruption. You seem to have mastered this, in fact, and I find it extremely impressive. With this flow comes emotion, and emotion is clearly and amazingly conveyed in this story. You include some happy memories, but they are bitter and overrun by nostalgic thoughts. Wonderful job!
The only thing I'd suggest is adding more commas. Because you are documenting someone's thoughts, it gets a little confusing if you don't have enough commas to give the reader pauses. I think it would help a lot.
Overall, you have incredible talent, so keep writing! |
 Sapphire-Eyes67 2004-03-27 . chapter 1Wow... ^_^ It's amazing that you can write like that, especially something that people can really relate to. You conveyed the emotions so clearly that the reader really understands what you're getting at. Great job! |
 BLARGH00000009 2004-03-23 . chapter 1Oh, God. . . I don't even know how to. . . oh.
If means anything anymore when it comes from me, the emotion you conveyed was perfectly clear and this flowed incredibly. |
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