we made the same kind of poem this year, too. it's so sad! well, more like 'i wish that that hadn't happened to you and i'm sry' sadness...i think that u really have a talent for poetry...me, no, but u...oh yeah...

that is definitely made up, but it helps some people to have a focus when writing... so...
the lines splices are interesting, perhaps punctuation at the end of lines? it's just that they seem separate thoughts, so eenjambment doesn't seem to work.
I like the poem though; don't get me wrong. and the last line is a conclusion, it's sweet. nice work!

damn.. that is very emotional. i was gonna cry.. such like i dunno... wow. ive wrote I Am poems before. maybe if i ever find em again i will post em. lol. nice *TI*

even better! haha I accidently read the 2nd one b4 this one. But it's really good! WRITE ON!
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