hmm, i liked this one much more than ur one life. two life rhyme
good flow, good use of similes and metaphors, good job

Not a big fan of hip-hop/rap, well at least the current stuff, unless it's Tupac, Eminem, and Outkast, but I have a lot of respect for people who can write the flows like that, the one type of music I ain't written yet. This is good and I could so see Eminem flowing this, I've got a good hard beat in my head to it and I am digging this. Great work man.

OH I like I really do I'm not really into rap or hip hop but your song is really col i bet it sounds good with music but i could picture it being a punk rock song but its cool ill read more of ur stuff