Oh this poem was so sad. But I still liked it. Good work.

luved the imagery! u write good poetry

This is realy good as well. Keep writing.

WOW *blinks* Wow...this is one of those poems you don't know what to say besides that it's one of the best I've ever read. Keep it up!
keep writing-
till-iburnout

you have a great unique way of writing your poems. i like this one even though it's a bit sad at the end.

This is so sad but I really like it alot. I wrote a poem titled "Betrayal" but yours paints a much different picture of the idea then mine. I like it alot.
Oh...I'd like to comment on what you said in your bio about "depressing stuff". I agree with you on that. I'm pretty sensitive and hate it when people aren't happy.(especially my friends) But to the point, I'm a fairly happy person and some of my stuff may seem depressing but that's only because that's what came to mind when I wrote it. I think it's healthy for a person to write depressing things as long as they warn people before hand.
It's a way of keeping those feelings on paper so that you don't have to keep them inside. I feel that it can be overwhelming if you keep things inside you.I also wanted to say that it's normal for people to be depressed every once and a while. I'm sure not everthing those people write is depressing.
Another thing, I write about some things like suicide because it's a very important issue and I think poems like that help you to get into a person's mind-set and help you to understand how things work in their situation. I also wrote about being cheated on even though I've never been in a relationship. I just like to say my opinions in my poems. People don't write things like that just so people will pity them or feel sad. They just want people to have a better understanding of the topic of choice.
All that's besides the point. Plese don't take what I've said to heart. Just think about it. I really did like this poem alot and just wanted to give you my personal opinion. This poem just got me thinking 'bout what you said because I thought this poem was fairly sad. Sad...but bery creative and well thought out. It was so good that I'm writing the longest review I've ever written. Keep up the great work and continue writing such great poems. I don't think I've read a poem that got me thinking this much. I'm quite gabby and I'd love to continue this one way discussion but I've got to go.
thanks for a great poem,
ShinjiBoi

Excellent imagery! I was a little confused at the begining, but it all came together in the end. Good work.
@->--Marry

My word, you're good. And *young*! Keep this up, and you're going to be quite the wonderful poet. Well, you are already; but I see so much potential in you, even beyond what you've already achieved. There are two lines in this poem, however, that you might consider revising. Those are: "crimson roses" and "who can she loathe more than her betrayer". The first, I think, has been so tainted by frothy romance novels that the phrase is ruined for serious writers like yourself. As for the second phrase, I am objecting mostly to the word "betrayer". It seems a little obvious that he has betrayed her. Perhaps you could find a term that would be a little more specific to his particular brand of betrayal, or just some more specific aspect of his character. Overall, though, your word choices were original and interesting and the poem was compelling. Good work!

Damn that's good. Intense, raw images pervade this poem. A great poem, for sure. It is very effective at conveying its message. Bravo! Well done!

Wow. This was tragically beautiful. I loved...I don't know how to say it...I guess I just loved the way you put the emotions into words. The stuff about the guy walking through her dreams, and the comparison between the girl and a bird was just inspired. I especially loved the last two lines which basically restated the whole thing in a simple yet wonderful way. Super job!
~Faith, Hope and Love

Oh, that was so... well, poetic, but that's kind of a given. I really liked how you balanced the poetic descriptions- "her fountains weeping blood", for instance- with straightforward phrases: "He shrugs/Didn’t know it meant so much". The characters come off as having strong personalities, too, which is really hard to display in a poem. Just one stupid little nit-picky thing: "It’s frantic wings against her breast"- should be "its". Sorry, just Sara being a grammar fanatic. Anyway, it's really beautiful, and heartfelt, and you did a wonderful job with it.

I was captivated from the first line. I adore your style and the plot itself...This is just so mournfully beautiful...
-God bless-

awesome poem! dark and angsty, but i like that. well written, full of emotions well conveyed. i like this piece a lot. good job. keep writing!

Rose is rarely crimsom... unless... blood.
Very touching and emotional, flowing too, not much to add.

"Stifled by a veil of unshed tears, The dying dove beating, It's frantic wings against her breast", "Her fountains weeping blood", one word: wow. Actually your poem with its vivid imagery left me speechless, and I must say you convey such an emotion very clearly. Well written!