i like this one too but you should change Lloa to Geena lol oh yeah and if you have an email adress you can email me sometime i get real bored 50% of the time when i dont have a mood for writing a story or reading one. Thanks again for reviewing my stuff.

"Clansman Sam"I loved that! Its so good. I'm glad you had a girl that practially saves the day. Her name should be kim. Haha. just kidding =D

I have an iMac...

::clears throat and puts on a brooklyn accent::
That's somma da best work I've eva seen! Now,I was particularly impressed by da imagery you gave. You've managed to, not only remind me of the roarin' twenties; but I got a little bit of da Godfather in dere. Don't ask how.
::ditches the accent::
Anyway. That was great. I'm off to review your other story now!
Oh, and thanks for the review!

Weapons, weapons, weapons...you want weapons knowledge. Well, that's kinda hard to do in one review, because I'm running out of time on the computer. I would strongly suggest that you get a free e-mail address (since you're thirteen, you're old enough to get one) and we can discuss this. Otherwise, it'll take longer to get around to the type of weapons that you want. Either way, I'll help you out.
-Steven

It was good... but you got the accents mixed up. That's actually "Chicagoish," not "New Yorkish," and I wouldn't use the accent in the narration; only when they're actually talking in quotations.

hey, guys. its sam. just to let u know... this is a one shot. i MIGHT- thats a definite MIGHT- write some more on this story, but right now im concentrating more on writing new stories... and dealing with other stuff. so... dont expect more on this story, but do expect a new one pretty soon.

Good job! You may consider making this into more than a one-shot, it has promise.

Ha, I love the characters! The story is great. Really. Keep going. I like this.

Coolness! Thanx for reading my story and I thought yours was awesome!

Nice story, I liked the idea, and you put in some great action scenes. I'm guessing that this is the end, but you should write some more.

You asked me to read the story, and in exchange for you giving me praise, I deliver.
Now, taken into consideration your age, what it was written for, and blah blah blah, this is got to be some of the best stuff I've seen somebody write at your age. I think that your stuff is better than what my stuff was at thirteen (less than three years ago).
Now, it was not without cheesy parts, but it was for school. (Never knew New Yorkers spoke so cleanly. :D) But overall, it had some good action.
If you want more weapons research, first, read more action books. They have plenty of gun names. From there, Google it, and you can get pictures. If you want any more advice, send me an e-mail.
8.0 out of 10 points. Good job.

This is a good story, keep it up. I like the slang.
more chapters please.

Nice, vey nice. It's not often that I read the works of other authors in this section because, truth be told, a lot of it is gibberish and hard to read. This, however, is a different story.
Very few people write about this era but I'm glad someone did. This is fantastic. I got a sense of the surroundings, the people, their movements...It was great. And you used all of the slang perfectly.
And it says in your bio that you're only 13?! You've got a future ahead of you. Keep up the great work.
~DSL

Interesting, a good start. Keep going, I'd like to see some more. Be sure to let me know when you update :)