very clever. i like it. but... well, you do know you didn't spell kitchen right, right?? i'll ignore that fact assuming it was intentional and artistic license.

Haha, I like that a lot. The ending really amused me. I find myself thinking like this a lot... once I was thinking about how accidents don't exist according to some people and I was thinking so hard I fell down the stairs and then I wondered if I didn't like myself and if I did it on purpose to hurt myself and then my dog came over and licked my ankle and I stopped thiking- ohmygosh, that was a long sentence, lol. And pointless... this is what happens when I review pointlessly late at night. Sorry! But the point is that this was really well done and I loved it. And I skimmed the others and I really like the first one and a few others I can't remember. Normally I'd review them all, but I'm too tired... but you're a really good writer- never stop! Later! ^.^

I freaking love this..you are such an amazing writer...good job.

I LOVE IT.

I really really like this bunches of bananas and whatnot. AH.

interesting, so it's about ur dog and kitchen appliances? well nice job here

It is a very interesting format. It moves the reader quickly along the poem, and they get hit with the feeling as their eyes travel down the screen. I love the premise, and the words themselves make it sound just like a mother comforting her child.

(If I had any criticism to give, I'd give it, but I have none, not for this poem, anyway.)

(You know Thalia Weaver? She's the Thalia Weaver who writes LotR fanfiction, is she not? I really love her stories.)

Cheers!Piombi Pozzi.

Nicely done. No critique to give, really. You've hit the mark. And this one's true as well, but in a more heartwrenching way than the ones which came before. Well done.

Cheers!Piombi Pozzi.

All of these poems are so darn /true/. The death of wit indeed. This is especially true of some kids I know at my school. *shakes head* Kids these days... In any case, well-written again, and I'm off to read more.

Cheers!Piombi Pozzi.

Hah! So true. Well-written; says a lot in only a few words (an admirable quality, in my mind).

Bwah. You said you like criticism, but normally it's difficult for me to criticize poetry (particularly well-written poetry ;)).

Cheers!Piombi Pozzi.

wow, these may be the most genius poems I've ever read!

You make me like poetry. And that is probably the highest compliment I can pay anyone. Some of these are so GOOD. I loved the eating disorder one, and the denouncement of poetry the most.

This one is better than the last two.

"zero calorie purity" is a better phrase. Look at Mercuria (on fictionpress)'s stuff--she has a poem that expresses this sentiment, not better per se, but longer. I think you'd like it.

Take out 'corny'.

The format's so spare extra words feel wrong. This is good, though, and very stark, and a little disturbing.

Flowing. Haiku-like. Nice. (I'm guilty of this, though.)

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