|Reviews for Spiral Arm Academy|
| Varion 11/3/06 . chapter 5
I will flood your email box and make your email checking a tedious process of deleting my missives if you don't consent to finish this story!
Heheh, ah the power of spam. Seriously though, I really like this story, besides which a rabbit as a familiar is just too cute, and humorous. How come this Soren guy is so interested in fighting and enemies and stuff? I think you need an enemy. There is still time to introduce someone.
Okay, that's all I wanted to say. Seriously though, I know you've got this story in you somewhere, and maybe the middle is lacking something, but that's where being a writer comes in.
Oh, and if you need a copy editor or a plot analyst, I'd jump a the chance to get to read this first before you posted to the net. Keep writing.
| PearlinTheMist 8/14/05 . chapter 5
listen here mystic author... it's been months and months since your last update of this story. I'll find you, this is great, UPDATE!
| Indy 6/13/05 . chapter 1
Oh. Very nice. *Indy hugs Spiral Arm Academy* Scifi AND magic? You are my favorite person ever.
| Varion 3/18/05 . chapter 5
Well, I like this one the best by far. The high tech low cash school is really interesting and is actually the first good reason I've heard to mix candles and flourescent lights. What's more, it makes a great setting for magic, telepathy, and technology to meet. One thing, I was a little confused when Soren showed up at the Geo dome. I think you might want to put some good exclamatory remark to let us know that Renah has forgotten all about Soren. Also, the idea of a rabbit as a familiar is really, new, maybe a little bizarre, and, not to pry, but I sense a certain attachement to forested groves in the author, just an proof of the interesting way that art and reality merge. Keep this one going, I really want to what happens next. There seem to be all sorts of possibilities.
| earthie who is lazy 9/20/04 . chapter 3
Hi aa. guess who didn’t feel like logging in? Heheh. I like this chapter, i had some complaints, but I’ve forgotten them, so they must not be important. Um...Oh, yeah, I would suggest not doing the post-best-artist’s-name thing for the drawing thing, cause people might feel left out and all. Wow, I am falling asleep! So sorry, this review is awful, but at least it’s a review! -_-
| Frank the Turkey 8/10/04 . chapter 2
I like this a lot. Nice cliffhanger at the end of ch. 2. Update soon!
| Autumn-Rose1942 6/29/04 . chapter 1
Hi! Thank u so much for reviewing my story! It means a lot to me that people actually like the junk i write. This is a great start, it captures the reader's attention and doesn't let ,I'm starting to sound like my english teacher! the answers to ur questions:
1. A beta reader is someone that u send new chapters to b4 posting them up on the site. They read over them, edit them,give suggestions on how to make them better, etc.
2. Thank u! : )
3. I just now got a beta reader, I'm gonna try and send her the new chapter sometime this week. But thanku for offering to be my beta!
4. sure, I'll read ur stories and write reviews for them. I wanna read the rest of them, but I'm taking some extra classes over the summer *glares at world history textbook*
anyways, keep on writing and update soon!
| ladylore 6/3/04 . chapter 1
great work - I am loving it!
Please rr me x
| Earthsong12 5/15/04 . chapter 2
Hello! Nice chapter, but one question. Why was she going to her dorm? She was supposed to be meeting the dean! Hmm. Anyway, write more! (I’m reviewing all your new stories, so the reviews will be short)
| OldJoe 4/4/04 . chapter 1
This is good so far, and I would like to see the story unfold. But dont do the drectors commentary sort of thing, like how you put (I'll probobly change that). If you do change something, just put it at the top of the page.
| Earthsong12 3/29/04 . chapter 1
Hello there Aspiring Author! Hmm, I need a nickname for you. People call me Earthie...OK, how about AA? So, the story is really cute so far. Short, though. I'm impatiently awaiting a continuation. So, on to critique:
Line 3: Why are the foes passive? And why is he scared of passive foes? And if they're gonna attack, then they're not passive, are they? OK, I think you get it.
Other stuff: I love the name Jeord, please don't change it! Also, so you know, author's notes inside of stories go in brackets, not parentheses, so you can tell them apart from the story. And could you not make the mindvoice capitals? It's kinda annoying. Lastly, in your first author's note, you wrote soory instaed of sorry. Alrighty, I'm all done now. The story is great! Don't change anything you don't want to. _
| Aspiring Author 3/28/04 . chapter 1
Doncha just LOVE my story? Please say yes! and critique, of course. which is different from critisize. OOK, I'll just shut up now.
| BIllyReuben 3/28/04 . chapter 1
well its good
but its short
deffinatly needs more added to the end,
but I like how it starts, nothing more needed there. If your changing names, I think if your trying to represent an alien world, Jeord is pretty good. (Personally, I think its better than Rena-ah)but it looks promising. keep it up