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chibashiru 2006-08-08 ch 1,	abuseVery nice imagery for the dream. I could actually hear the women screaming and feel the panic that was taking place. I loved the twist you put at the end! I was all expecting him to wake up in the emergency room or for it to actually be a dream, but wow, very unexpected. This seems like the perfect opening for a longer piece; I especially got the feeling that Ryan's past had a lot to do with his actions and it seemed as if this was setting us up for a longer story. Don't be cruel by keep us in suspense! =) Keep up the great work,Joy
Infinite Abyss 2005-09-18 ch 1,	abuseThat was great! I found a couple of spelling errors though like "loosing" which is supposed to be "losing" and there were also a few words missing but other than that everything was perfect. Seriously, awesome job. Keep writing.
EyriNyx 2005-03-14 ch 1,	abuseO, wow this is definitly different from the other stories. I can't believe it took me so long to put in my review when I read this months ago. Hello Mrs. Jean Claud. How's BCC You really haven't been updateing have you.
D L Dzioba 2004-12-01 ch 1,	abuseThis is a really good story, it really is up to you if you want to add more or not. I like the way its so eerie and such... On another note regaurding a review of yours on one of my projects, I am Christian, but I do, however, realize that there are other religons out there and I am not trying to offent anyone, my e-mails to "God" are simply ment to be a sort of Joke
steinbock 2004-11-30 ch 1,	abusedude i did read this a while ago... ah well, but the review thing works now, so I'll review... Great! I must say I love ur work :) oh...one quick thing :"and all those other great stuff." i think it might sound better if u said "and all those other great things" or "and all that other great stuff" i dont know if there is a gramatical name for that, but I think it sounds better
AgniKaiKyoshi 2004-11-18 ch 1,	abuseWow. That's-wow-really good. It was a little confusing at the beginning, but I guess that it was supposed to be to make the end make sense. PLEASE post more!
Kinetic Wolf 2004-10-23 ch 1,	abusewow, really nice i loved it from, Kineticwolf2
Sorcha Jade 2004-06-13 ch 1,	abusethat was very kewl! i think you should efinitely continue!! go go! and i did continue my story too, if you woudln't mind checking it out. i'm going to read another story of yours now. so toodles
slave to the voices 2004-05-17 ch 1,	abuseI think this works very well as a short piece and, if it were me, I wouldn't add anything. The story is well written and I loved the twist at the end. I saw your review of someone else's story which is what got me to read this. If you have time, I would like to hear what you think of some of my stories. Please feel no obligation. Anyway, great job, keep writing. Slave
Werecat99 2004-04-25 ch 1,	abuseCreepy. There were some grammar flaws, but nothing major. Overall, I liked it.
NiNjApOoN619 2004-04-19 ch 1, anon.	abuseVery mysterious and scary. This is different from your style in your other stories. I wonder if you are going to write another chapter for this series because there isn't very much to write about. This story is kind of short and lacks the detail..but very good idea, i must admit. Sort of like Sixth Sense. I kind of got lost in the middle of the story w/ the robbery part. Good otherwise.
greenbanana 2004-04-11 ch 1,	abuseBeeps! that rocked... Very unique twist. I wasn't expecting that... well, anyway, that rocks, noth as a one-shot and maybe later as part of a larger story. Great work!
Marshall 2004-04-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseHeyy nina. I just recently read this "story" which is probably still under construction if u know what i mean. I like the cliff hanger that caught my attention. At first, the story seemed to original to me. DOn't get me wrong, but ya. So i read it write and i thought, hmm sound familiar to some other story...hmm..?? But ya ar the end of ur "story," questions started popping in my head so i was like hey cool. My suggestion is to continue to make more chapters. It would seem to be an interesting story. Strengths- i like the beginning how it starts as a hostage scene. A lotta questions swirled in my mind which was pretty exciting. Weaknessess- The one thing that i would change, generally, (not this particular story), is to think of something unique. Something that u grab and pull in different directions if u know what i mean. Overall, this story caught my attention so good job.
SpawnMeister666 2004-04-09 ch 1,	abuseA nice piece. Short and to the point. Like it very much. Spawny
wazzupers (aka kuikick) 2004-04-07 ch 1, anon.	abuseHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAH (IF ONLY I COULD CHANGE THE SIZE OF THE TEXT) hahahahaha.a.. ha.. ha... hum. okay i'm done. don't worry, i was just laughing at my own stupidity of looking at the end before i started. i usually do that with books, but only the last sentence, so it doesn't mess up anything, but this story was too short for that. it's brilliant. it is. and you know, this could make a great series. talk to me if you want a plot. my ppl will call ur ppl. lol jk. i like it. better than ch. 6. and 5, and 4. JOKING! i don't even remember what those were... a million years ago. oh well, i suppose i should read the thing. prism. thing. yah. (btw, there should be something in the story that links with the title. so if you don't have something already, add it. like, a magic crystal prism thingy or w/e). luck and love Kuikkick

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