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| JinRagnarok 2004-03-30 ch 1,   | I like this one, even though the pacing is a bit off. A bit more could have been added to make the poem flow at the beginning. Good job bud. |
| The Duck Killers 2004-03-29 ch 1, | Wow...I can tell that you just splurted this one out of your fingers. (splurt is a word that I made up, hehee! Luv that word!) I know the feeling. Some ideas just get into your head and you just have to write them down. Good. Although I think you can make it a little more clear by adding something more... ~chu* |