great story cant wait until its updated:)

what happened to the rest of this story no lemon no nothing i hope you don't end the story like this with a cliff hanger?
or are you going to make another part too this story and turn it into a saga/sequel/series?

Ergh. I haven't been paying any attention to Fictionpress lately... shame on me, I know. Lovely, as always.
Love you, dearest Lynnsey. (well.. you know what I mean.. and I can't recall ever saying I loved someone... but I DO.. in some sort of way.. the way you love a friend.. ah whatever..)

write more! it's evil that you stopped right in the middle.

I'm glad that you've written a longer chapter! Everything's coming together now and making more sense and I was drawn right into the world that you've created. I really liked the kind of mythological references in this chapter, such as the mirror and the fable of the goddesses, adding another level to the story and making it much deeper. Also, the characters are still very intriguing. Now that I know it was Purgatory who had that horrific dream, I have a lot more insight into his lonely, tortured character and I wonder how he will interact with his new 'house guest' lol Definitely intriguing (sorry for my late review) and keep writing!

Aha! I have finally got my internet back and what do you now a story was updated! *cheering in the background and a dancing tuxedo cat, which is followed by an akward silence* uh... *cough* I wonder where that cat came from since my cats are exiled to my mom's house.. hm... Oh well. Thank you, almighty writer of fictionpress for
updating!

that's really awesome. yeah.. awesome. uh.
yeah. *dies*

ah yes this story is finnaly unwraping. I know I've been real anooying latly hovering over you while you type your story. and then sitting in the floor playing Pokemon, annoying you to death with little bleeps and bloops of the gameboy advance. But Eggie hatched! He's not an egg anymore! I love this story but I only see one thing wroung with it, you need to indent your paragraph's and seperate what they are saying like this:
I could feel there claws at my neck serching for a way inside. it was all Yume's fault that I'm here. all his damn fualt. And where was my mother? Where was Vincentia?! WHere is the angel? I want Vincentia!
"Yume!! You son of a **! Where is Vincentia!?" I cried out. My voice was harsh. Too low to ever be heard in this hell of a place.
I was falling farther into the darkness the over head light was slowly going out. And all their hands..touching me grabbing me. The demons hands wandering all over me. i want to be back in my Asylum walls. Back into my padded cell. Back with Vincentia. oh mother. Oh sweet heaven...
"Yume..." I wisphered as I hit the ground. My spine shattered. i felt it burn. Oh the pain. Lying here in the bottem of this hole with a fractured skull and a large gaping would in my temple. Why can't I die? WHy?
"Oh Daemon..." Yume sick laughter filled my ringing ears he was watching this. All of this. Sick, vile creature.
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oh wow! I just took a part of my new story and stuck it in there. tee hee. You all may never know untill I finnaly post it. I just need to seperate it into chapters first >< long lengthy process.
See ya laters Shini-chan
-Kurokumo Yume

I wish your chapters were longer because lately your story is the only one I'm reading right now, but I will live... as long as you update often. I very much enjoy your story so far... it gives me a reason to get on the computer. I'll shall be waiting... somewhat patiently on the floor with my cat for the next chapter. Ja.

Interesting. Keep it up I want to learn more. The chapters are short and mysterious in a way.

Hey ! *happy dance* I rock ! *twirls around the room* *wink* nah, nah, nevermind... blame the hyperness... I loved the "I will always feel your wings..." part a lot... well, actually, I loved the chapter, but I just think that part is really special. You know, I like the names you gave them, very Japanese-like and stuff ^^ Well, nice going :)
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Ooh, the plot progresses and now I'm getting more curious and intrigued. I wonder what's gonna happen to Shunji now that he's been sold - is that a good thing or a bad thing? And what about the vampire guy's (Ewell?) freaky dream? Anywho, update soon!

Beautiful writing, if not a little ambiguous. I love the poetry aspect to the way you write and how details are graphic but just touched upon. I liked the poem at the beginning a lot, especially the repetition of 'Look, Look' and the images you use to describe the world coming apart in a strangely beautiful way. I also liked the description of the dream and the dismembered children *shudders* and how the characters and the way they speak are rather archaic. Anyway, there's another chapter so I'm off to read that!

I'm just a little confused, but I still enjoy this story. I will be awaiting your next chapter, please make it as soon as possible.

*claps* I loved it ^-^ But short perhaps, but feck, I really think it's awesome :)