awesome descriptions and awesome story. i think it would have been cool if you didn't let the reader know what she was about to do until the very end. i.e. don't mention the train or that these will be her "last words" until the end. but that's just me and my obsession with surprise endings :)

very interesting idea, good description. i like the story.

Not a bad start!! It'll be cool to see where it's gonna go!
Take Care,
Aricah