Nice chapter. Short but sweet and to the point. Can't wait till the next chapter.

Yeah... While not the best of yours it was still good. Events should've been stretched out longer and things shouldn't come straight out of left-field like the appearance of the skeleton horde. Not to mention the story seems to make no sense right now. Anyway, looking forth to Chapter 5.

Interesting chapter here. While I don't quite like the part about Josh playing game cube again, and eating lunch, as both were a little dull, I'm very impressed with your creativity at making the poster talk. It's inspiring to me. Please try to remember to use proper punctuation (such as question marks on questions) though, okay?
Overall, nice job and keep writing!

Okay, great story here so far! However, some things you need to fix:
-Make your chapters longer.
-When the same person is talking, you don't need to skip a line...instead of doing this:
"Good morning, dear," she said.
"I'm making bacon, toast, and eggs. What would you like to drink," Mom asked.
It would be better if you did this:
"Good morning, dear," she said. "I'm making bacon, toast, and eggs. What would you like to drink?" Mom asked.
I hope you can understand what I mean by that...
-Have this proofread. If you can't get anyone to proofread for you, wait a couple of days before putting up the chapter and then proofread yourself.
-About your descriptive writing...it doesn't really tell the reader a whole lot. For example:
Our kitchen looks very modern. It is shiny and has many cupboards in it. It has a brown, wooden table with seating for four in the middle of it with chairs to match.
That doesn't really give me a picture. What kind of shape is the room? What colours are in the decor? When doing descriptive writing, you should take all of the senses into consideration. Put what the character sees, hears, smells, etc. You have to paint a picture so that the reader can really see everything.
- "Dad is a laborer so he never knows if he is going to work that day or not."
This is an example of a part that can be vastly improved. Instead of just leaving that as a simple statement, you could add to it. You could add an example of a time when Josh's father was called into work at the last minute or something like that.
-Not much is happening...events that occur in this story should be things that have to do with the plot or what will be happening later on in the story. The fact that Josh played game cube for an hour doesn't really seem to be meaning a whole lot.
I hope I'm not offending you at all by saying all of this; but I'm only trying to help you improve. This is constructive criticism, keep that in mind. I know that I'm not a perfect writer or anything, but I also know what I like to see in things I read.
Other than that, I'd say your writing is pretty excellent! Good work, and always keep writing!

Hey...erm.. I got the idea for Horror Story just from the fact that I did get a flamer..u know what I mean? My imagination just went into over drive and I was like, 'What if...??' So yeah. You can call yourself my "inspiration" but definitely not the baddie! :p
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Hey Coolyay...thanks for your apology (you didn't have to do that!) It's ok, I guess I was a bit harsh when I reviewed your first one so we're even now ok? lol...I do like "I'm Dead" so yeah... :p

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Coolyay- keep up the great work, because you have a powerful written chapter here. Even though its short, it was definately worth the read.

Hey, this is very neat. Keep it up.

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Nice job.

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So short. I liked it, but your writing, it needs to be longer.

i definitely got a few chills reading this piece...my only suggestion is that you build up to Jonathan saying he is going to kill the Joshua...it was so abrupt that there really was no suspense...but overall i liked it! keep writing!

A nice continuation. I'm being annoyed by my friend, and may not continue to be on the computer. Nice story.

A very neat story. I'm taking a big risk reviewing this now, since I'm at school, and not supposed to be on the computer in the first place. Anyway good start.

you write very interesting stories...

Ok, two things.
1 - Posting in your own review pages is sort of sad.
2 - Reviewing a story of mine and attacking both it and me just because I didn't like one of your stories is immature and quite sad. Please refrain from reviewing any of my stories because you are just making yourself look like a fool.