Hey...nice..you got all rhyming words...anyway...just work on i guess trying to let it not "sux" since you say it does?...but i think it is fine

It's a good song, well structured and some lovely ryhming lines. It kind of makes me sad, Im not sure if thats the intention of the song, but if so it does it well. Keep up the good work
I rate this song: 8.3/10