 Katrina Gabrielle 2005-09-11 . chapter 1 O, I loved this one too. "The oceans that are crying, volcanoes full of ire,The greenery that's dying, and a streetcar named Desire."THAT WAS THE AWESOMEST LINE. This has a million different hidden meanings that are really up to the reader to decipher, or at least that's what I'm getting from it. Very cool. |
 Anjeni Windsinger 2004-12-04 . chapter 1O.o Awesome! I loved the rhythm - I was actually bobbing my head to it, lol - and everything else - word choice, flow, rhyme - is spot on perfect. Excellent poem ^_^ |
 aalewis 2004-04-10 . chapter 1Hee-hee. I don't get your poem, but it sounds good. And I'm not sure why, but it makes me want to laugh. I think thats a good thing.
So, I think your poem is a bit weird, but it sounds like a real poem, you know, like one of those poems that are really deep and you don't get it but you like it anyways. Very interesting. Smashing job! |
 obsidian katana 2004-04-02 . chapter 1awesome poem. well written, nice rhyming and rhythm, the poem has a good flow to it and the repetition works well with this piece. i like how you capitalized Desire, Despair, Melancholy, Unfair, Defeat, Deception, Retreat, and Nature. it has a good effect, almost personifying them. anyway, this is insightful, i like it a lot. great job! |
 Crelian2202 2004-04-01 . chapter 1Nicely done. I didn't see anything wrong with it, so good job. |
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