About the spacing... yeah I have that problem too it could be that you leave it in story format when you submit, but i have to hit enter twice to insert a line between stanzas... i dunno if you use MSWord it loses all it's format... at least that's what i'm told happens :) Hope that is some help
LOL oh and of course the review that says how good the writing was ;)

This is so sweet! I especially liked the beginning. "...if she wanted the kind of things that money just couldn't buy, then he would be more then happy to give them to her..."

Kind of makes me think of pagan moon-worshipping...
Anyway, sorry to see that Fictionpress didn't let you break it up into paragraphs, though there are some parts where you didn't need to break one sentence into two. Fix it up, and it'll a dandy little fantasy.

I did break it into paragraphs, but the word processor of fictionpress had other ideas, and it squished all my words togethor. I realy hate that, if anybody knows how I can prevent it from happening, please tell me.

i love it! very descriptive but not overly descriptive:D the only suggestion i have for it is that you break it up into paragraphs but other than that is is a wonderful piece! keep writing!