okay, though this poem isn't exactly your normal style, it still seems to shine with a brilliance. you have so much talent! even what could be called a medicore (spelling?) poem was fantastic for the bonds it had to fit into.

I actually found this to be an enjoyable read; the way the verses were put together I especially liked, because I know how hard poetry can be some times.
I hope your story writing abilities are as good as your poetry ones.

Well concieved, with an ability to picture the scene and feel the fear in the characters portrayed.
Well Done
keep Writing!
F.C
I have a poem entitled "Roulette" but with a diffirent angle on it. See what you think if you like.