I like this, its very comedic.

I really liked the second caption when you started giving me imagery of a rotting head with scavengers all over it, tearing chunks off it. cut of from its supply of life juice.

not my favourite of your stuff. sounds mostly drunk. i didn't like the last line, but there were interesting images towards the middle, like "they are all curs ? mangy and floppy." and "turns to slush and wet muddy junk". i like, i like. the "fly butterfly! fly!" thing wasn't so great, however, i ddin't think.
thanks for your review!

Just a little confusing, but it reminds me of myself in 1st period. "Roll along little head, roll!"