Aw! "Hirui and Aimee sittin' in a tree..." I think a good name for Cook would be Ali, and u could introduce the name by having some1 ask Cook what his/her (i can't remember) name is. i think uncle should stay uncle though, unless if someone has a name idea.Please review my stuff!-Sul

O.O update! i devour it!!
he saves her!!
possible growing feelings!! it's late and i'm dizzy so that's prolly why i'm redudantly using exclamation points!!
i'll talk to you later when i'm in a saner frame of mind!!
--cat

Yay! kinata lives!
good update! one suggestion;
Where it says 'Cook immediately reemerged herself in the activities of the kitchen' do you mean 'resubmerged'?
otherwise, great update! I'm watching you for moree~ ^_^
~ponteh

Great,I really loved it, but watch for typos!
"After looking around her sprang off to the right" is that supposed to be "HE sprang off..?
"Reaching his nephew, his uncle began to say, 'She finally woke up, so I went her to take a bath. Get some food to take to her and help her with the bandages. I need to get back to work.'"
What is the uncle saying "so I went her to take a bath"? this doesn't make any sense at all.
"Walking carefully, and somewhat slowly" Isn't this implied?
Also, right before she finds Hirui with his sword she "decides to find [him]" but then when she sees him, she just watches him and goes back to her room. Is there a point to her trying to find him in the first place?
And lastly "As h left, Aimee.." Typo typo typo, *he. I seriously loved the story though and can't wait to hear more. That was all the concrit I had for it. Keep it up and update soon please! ^^

Wow! sounds great! Is there going to be more to the story? I really hope so! I will be reading your other stories in the future when I have more time, but if they're all like this then I can't wait! *ps: Thanks for adding me to your favorite list! It made such a terrible day a very happy one just to see that!

A wonderful beginning to this story...wherever it may go. This character, the way you write of her, seems extremely brave...I'm sure she's got a past of some kind that will reveal itself later on. Can't wait to read more!

Nicely written, I liked it. (Sorry Im new at this reviewing stuff)

Not bad. I can tell I'm going to be pursuing this one. You've been added to my alert!
My biggest suggestion would be to change the name. It's almost too 'new age' for this story, I feel. But, I'm not going to nitpick about a name.

You should be ashamed of yourself. Here you are nagging me and lile to update and yet you have nothing...and even I - who, by the way, does not have a computer - managed to update! so hurry! get off your lazy ** from the couch and get going! On the double! And review my new oh-my-god-cat-actually-updated-it's-a-miracle update!

nice first chappy~ most interesting^^ the sky cries rain, yay^^

This is an interesting plotline, but Aimee's adventure seems a little too "Happily Ever After"-ish. The its been written is cool enough, but it would be so much more interesting if Aimee had been captured by the guards.

This one little girl calls me Aimee because she tells me i look like that would be my name ^.^ and then i call her a different name every time i meet up with her because she calls me aimee and i cant remember her real name anyway...
anyhoo! QUICK with the next chappie because this one sure as hell does not reveal much T-T besides that aimee can jump from high spaces and is very good at defending herself (the action bit is new from you sorta)!
ok, gotta get this next backup file done!

O I can't wait to see what happens!
Great job Kinata!! Good story, good descriptions, nice sensitive writing. You might want to express the feeling of pain she's most likely experiencing, but I think it's fine the way it is, anyway. Keep up the good work!
~pont