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| Basara 2008-04-01 ch 4,  | hmm... where ancient knowledge lie... so with pictures of experiences... nice... |
| Franziska 2008-04-01 ch 4, | Auch auf Gefahr, dass außer dir keiner den review versteht, schreibe ich doch lieber deutsch. Du beschwörst ein sehr schönes Bild. Es passt sich mühelos in die Form ein. Manchmal wirken Haikus ja recht artifiziell. Schön auch, dass du offen läßt, ob es deine eigen Erinnerungen sind und wenn ja woran. |
| kloun doll 2008-04-01 ch 4, | the imagery is pretty melancholic. |
| Dormio 2008-04-01 ch 4, | Wow, this is so beautiful. I love the last line :] |
| Ygg 2008-04-01 ch 4, | One can almost feel the memories being dripped of this poem! I love the slight touch of melancholy and old wisdom, combined with an almost forgotten youthful laughter, as if a sacred symbiosis exists between them. And what symbol can be better used than that of a tree. This Haiku touches the Heart, which is far more difficult than touching the mind. This is a brilliant Haiku, a favorite Haiku. Extraordinary work! |
| Keskonrix 2008-03-19 ch 4,  | Gotta love these "breathing memories"... Another haiku from you that follows the classical haiku scheme, describing a nature scene in the first two lines and a human component in the third - with the human component not strictly separated, but embedded into the picture, only through the very last word of the poem. Makes it even easier to paint a picture in one's inner eye. |
| Franziska 2008-03-08 ch 3, | Ein schöner Kontrast zwischen dem Veilchenduft und iern (wie ich hoffe) nur leicht melancholischen Stimmung |
| Franziska 2008-03-08 ch 2, | Das hast du sehr schön ausgedrückt! |
| Ygg 2008-02-18 ch 3, | I love the "why?" at the end.. it makes the previous lines mystifyingly concrete, and yet so abstract. The paradoxical image works through on different levels, without really putting the finger on its exact meaning. I love it when such mystifying Haiku are published, because they keep bouncing in the back of your head for a while after having read it. Marvelous! |
| Ygg 2008-02-18 ch 2, | Wow the fragility can almost be felt, especially in the second line, "graceful heads on slender stems". Such delicately chosen imagery, woven together to a web of subtle emotions of despair, hope and melancholy. Brilliant! |
| Ygg 2008-02-18 ch 1, | Excellent imagery to magnify the weeping heart! Great work once again. |
| Gleechumber 2004-07-21 ch 3, | Three beautiful pieces, and I love the way that you answer with the question which will always remain unanswered- why? |
| WolfOfBloodMoon 2004-06-02 ch 3, | Once again I say that they are good! |
| Getuie 2004-05-09 ch 1, | A very clear image painted in this one |
| Laineniel 2004-05-04 ch 3, | Thes are all really beautiful. You have a great talent for conjuring sharp and precise mental images with out wasting space on a page with extra words. I really admire that in your work! |