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My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 44,	abuseI like the feeling of hurt and futility, very realistic. However, this could have flowed a bit better, it seemed a little choppy to me. Shameless plug: it's review marathon time(link in profile)!
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 43,	abuseI like the general feeling of new in addition to old. At first the last line confused me then I got it and i think it is a great foreshadowing because of what it was preceded by.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 42,	abuseI like the sense of false comfort, it is raw and honest. You structured this well, it make a lot of sense and evokes strong emotions.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 41,	abuseI like the new usage of the common "crimson streams" because it took it a step further and became symbolic. The imagery is powerful and diturbing, which is good in this.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 40,	abuseI like the way you end it, it sums up and explains your habit. The second line seemed a bit clinky to me.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 39,	abuseI like your use of symbolism, it fits together really well. However, the last line could possible be rewritten with emphasis on structure.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 38,	abuseI like how you use and old concept (deep inner wounds) and say it in a new way, it's refreshing. However, I feel this poem could be put together better.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 37,	abuseI like the imagery because it is original and dramatic. I like the metaphorical screaming and how you made it metaphorical with "toothless" because it is subtle and poetic.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 36,	abuseI like the perspective of this, it add drama. However, you could do a little more description.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 35,	abuseI like the vortex concept, it is an often ignored word though it describes this so perfectly. I like the fourth line because it added emphasis to the vortex.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 34,	abuseI like shower of kisses concept because it adds so much meaning. However, I felt the fist line was a bit forced.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 33,	abuseI liked this one a lot, the imagery painted a powerful picture worth more than a thousand words. I like how the first two lines seem to go in on direction and then the last one seems to just stand there.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 32,	abuseI like the rhyming and the imagery, it made the poem seem real. However, "why still increase it?" seemed a little forced.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 31,	abuseI like this, it isn't beautiful, it is ugly with sadness and hopelessness. I like the way you used screaming and the words used around it, very original.
My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 30,	abuseI like the rhyming, it is rare to find that in haikus and it's kind of nice. You might want to watch how many times you used the word "skin's" because the poem is so short.

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