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| Clap Clap Raise Your Hands 2005-02-19 ch 1,  | abuseWow, I love everything about this, really, clever idea too x |
| Emmytastic gal 2004-08-20 ch 1, | abuseWow. thats a magnificent piece of work. it flows wonderfully and it seems like it just has the perfect words... its awesome and I love it. write on |
| Rosemary Greene 2004-07-12 ch 1, | abuseFree Verse is good ^_^. It's deep and thought provoking which is what I like in a poem. It's mystical. Continue Writing. ~Raven Demon |
| helter-skelter667 2004-06-12 ch 1, | abuseHm... While it was good, there was something wrong. It had no form. In the first verse, the sixth line and the eighth line rhymed, which was good. But after that, there was no rhyming, and then at the end it rhymed again. While the words and idea were very good, the unstable form kept it from flowing. I would chose whether I want it to rhyme or not, and also chose a certain form. (ie 6 syllables, 2 syllables, 3 syllables, 6 syllables, 2 syllables, 3 syllables, etc.) |
| JJR Meerraf 2004-05-18 ch 1, | abuseVery abstract and random, but as I've said to many, that's one of my fav genres. This was very artistic, and I loved reading it. Great work! |
| Loveless Wolf 2004-05-02 ch 1, | abuseI really like your poem. And it is pretty depressing but once and a while, we like depressing poems. ^_^ It also makes us wonder if that could possibly happen when we died. |
| Shinji Boi69 2004-05-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is really good. i liked it all the way through. You should wright more poems cuz you're good at them. This poem was really really good. I usually don't read long poems but this was so good. I couldn't help but read the whole thing. (that's my wierd way of giving a compliment) sorry if i'm alittle crazy. i really did like this. |
| Shadow of the Light 2004-04-28 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is such a kewl piece! I love it. There is so much turmoil, and beauty in this poem...well at least to me there is beauty...its very captivating and enthralling! I hope to find some more time to read more of your work! Until next time, ttfn! =^_^= Shadow PS thank you for reviewing my poem! |
| WickedSilence 2004-04-27 ch 1, | abuseWow. That was pretty good. The passages bring you close to pity for the spirit and I think the emotion is very strong. On the other hand, I think some of the lines have one too many words to keep the flow going. It may be an "and" or a "yet", I'm not quite sure. Altogether, it was a strong poem with a mostly strong cadence. |
| Professor D. S. Silvers 2004-04-25 ch 1, | abuseSeeing as I'm a poetess myself, i can see the depth in this poem. It's really intense, good work! Wine and Vanilla, Drusilla |
| Tom Madden 2004-04-23 ch 1, | abuseyou should definitly write more poems cuz this one was kickass! full of emotion; very good! |
| Werecat99 2004-04-19 ch 1, | abuseCreepy, but I liked it. I'm not much of a poet, so I fear I cannot comment any further. Thanks for the reviews, BTW. |
| whatsapenname 2004-04-09 ch 1, | abusevery interesting BUT iT WOULD BE BETTER IF IT RHYMED! sorry, i flip out when poems dont rhyme. good job anyways. loki as in greek god loki? i live in virginia too, but im in a dc suburb so everybody considers it dc. what town would nowhere be? let me know -whatsa- |
| Angry Fairy 2004-04-06 ch 1, | abusewow! i love the feel of the poem! great job... wonderful poem |
| Amaya Windsong 2004-04-05 ch 1, | abuseoh. very good. you should write poems more often, you're pretty good. |Rikku| |