Aw...Poor Kiran...::crying::

Ravaa and those EVIL MEN are SO MEAN. They hurt Kiran and he's not even want to revene on them...Aw...He's SOO NICE. HE's so nice to deserve to live this EVIL environement. Poor him...

Please let him be somwhere. This place is EVIL with EVIL poeple.

I really LOVE YOUR story a lot! Can't wait to read more of it especially Kiran.

Great story and good writing!

PLEASE UPDAT MORE SOONN!

you were right, things are going from bad to worse. i feel terrible for Kiran. its just hard to believe someone so innocent turned evil. i hope things might get a bit better? please? Kiran doesn't deserve this! update soob!! ^_^

Ravaa is a **. She was all nice and pretending to help Kiran and then she shoots him up with some magic potion stuff and puts him in worse pain and makes him a unicorn. Poor Kiran. :(

"Killing them would lower himself to their level" - Kiran used to have a conscience? and morals? WOW.
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and now I'm POSITIVE ravaa is crazy? Taking in a little boy and planning on making him some revenge-crazy freak? she is psycho...
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ok so... ravaa wants revenge on Traven for doing *something* to her I don't know yet... lover's quarrel, I presume - and she is using Kiran to do it? And Kiran didn't even want to have revenge in the first place! But how did he get to be the mean evil Kiran who loves to kill and get revenge? What changed him so much?

OMG! Poor Kiran! He didn't even want revenge on those EVIL guys and EVIL Ravaa hurts him! GR I HATE RAVAA NOW! Well I did before too, but now I hate her even more for hurting my baby Kiran! And he's so young and all this stuff is happening to him! Poor little baby! Now anyway! I'm very iggnorant when it comes to the opposite sex *blushes uncontrollably* I haven't even seen a naked guy before! I'm in high school already too! My health classes are very not informative and only show us stuff about our own sex. The stuff we already know! GR to them! Now look at me! I don't even know how guys rape other guys! Do they shove it up the other guys butt or something? HAHAHA! That would be funny! Mwa ha ha ha! I love all of your stories, you're such a great author! I LOVE YOUR CHARACTERS SO MUCH! THEY ARE SO HOTT! MWA HA HA! Update soon!

'He then realized that he wasn't where he has last been' -You'd want 'had' instead of 'has' in order to keep it past tense rather than switch around to present tense.
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Poor little guy. He's got to be so scared. But he's surprisingly rational after what happened to him. Very few people (at least, that I know) who've been raped don't come out of it with the urge to kill the person who hurt them.
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I'm wondering how the hell they became lovers after she did that to him. I'm guessing it was a pretense on his part, acting loyal while plotting revenge all along. Poor Kiran. He really is such a tragic character.

well poor thing, though he was nuts lol. um...i've read your stories and well hey i ain't complaining too much. poor darling. poor sexy darling. can i borrow him for a while?

Me: Oh boy, it just gets better and better for Kiran.
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Phoenix: Wow, what a hell of a life.
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Me: Oh, and don't you worry about those men being dead, we just kicked the hell out of them and stabbed them in the spleens.
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Me: Yeah, now for reviews on characters. Ravaa, nasty little **. Excuse me, I'm going to kick the hell out of Ravaa with Hikari. And if I spelled that wrong Dimmi-Chan, DON'T KILL ME! Anyway, off to kick the **! *Runs off with steel-toed boots*
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Phoenix: Before I help him, I'll review Kiran. Jesus Christ he has a terrible life! Hope it gets better for him, even though I doubt it very much. Great chapter, great story, update as soon as possible with all three of your stories escpecially the sequal and...
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Both: (Somehow I got back to say this and even I don't know why...) CONTINUE PLEASE! Well, OFF TO KICK THE **!

Lucifer and Aya: O_O Dear God...
Hikari: 8twitches than pounces on Ravaa and starts punching her hard while screaming every derogatory word she knew*
Dimmi-Chan: Er... yeah. Hikari, breath.
Hikari: *glares DOOM at Dimmi*
Dimmi: *hides* never mind.

'It sounded like a group of men laughing and talking; and they weren't too far off.' Right here I got a really Bad Feeling. Really Bad.
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And I see I was right . . .
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I'm just utterly creeped out by this chapter. And as for your author's note, what are you saying, exactly? I have a scene that actually goes into some detail of the horrific act, and I've even let you read it.

OH MY GOD! Poor Kiran!AW! No wonder he's so messed up! Now I don't hate him quite so much. The poor baby.

Yes, MUAHAHA I'm evil. I needed Kiran to have more than an abusive father If I wanted to feel bad for him. But I hate Ravaa because I see her as a jealous (insert assorted swear word) and she was mean to my poor lovely Traven! So now you made me feel SO bad for Kiran... you are evil! lol jk, but seriously this is so depressing.. I mean he was only 10! I want to hear the rest of the story now, when he is older with Ravaa... and what about Traven's story! updateupdateupdateupdate please!

Me: I just checked the reviews and noticed my last review was 3/4 erased! Maybe another glitch? Well, anyway, if you don't know, in my last review I was pitying Kiran and Phoenix and I were going to murder those lousy bastards who did it! WE WERE GOING TO HOLD THEM BY THE NOSE AND WE WERE GOING TO KICK THEM IN THE **! WE WOULD KICK THE HELL OUT OF THEM AND THEN RUN OUR SWORDS THROUGH THEM! *pant pant* That was all of it. Oh yeah, great chapter, great story, update as soon as possible, and CONTINUE PLEASE!

Both: O . O; Holy **.
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Phoenix: Good lord! FOUR MEN?! JESUS!
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Me: > .

poor Kiran! i feel so bad for him. i can't believe those evil men raped him. that is just terrible. and having Ravaa find him was good...but how good? she saved Kiran, but she has do many bad things later on. so, for now, i'm grateful to Ravaa. although i know that will change. update soon!! ^_^