aaww i liked that story... it's really morbid but cuute.. i like that.. aw... i don't think your story sucks.. i think it's great!!

amazing

This is a story that we should look at, we should read it and then read it again. -This story is one that I understand...-

um, yeah, is this a boy or a girl, i can't tell. sorry

Powerful and stunning. I shall see your poems.
~Grave

Another good chapter, Deep romance and love, full of pain.
~Grave

Sad but beautiful, I will continue to read. as long as you cotninue to write.
~Grave

update hurry

very tastefully written, yet still dirty.

I like it. It has some of the pains of life in it. You are a very good writer.

Hey hey, finally get some action here heh *grin* not bad. I find it a bit teen angsty with her cutting herself but it's not THAT cliche but yeah.. *can't explain myself* that's all this critique will give you, now onto the compliments. I like this chapter because you didn't wait too long to let the feelings be known. I also thought it was good how you lead up to it. Good descriptions, I like. Keep up the writing. I hope you'll update soon.
Jenna xx

it's obvious that your a poet, the way you write, it paints these beautiful pictures...i think that poets can make the best writers. i love this, god...please write more. i love the imagery, the derangement of the senses, the way things are linked...it's awesome. please please write more. i will definitely review your poetry when i get the chance, as i am a poetry nut.

good chapter. can't wait for more. till next time!

nothing to say...

keep writing!