I read it out loud, and the only part where the rhythm seemed off was "I can't believe it of you" only the 'of' part. I still think it's a good poem, especially written so long ago. And for some reason I have Tom Dooley stuck in my head...hang down your head Tom Dooley, hang down your head and-ok, I'll go now. : )

I’m must admit you’re poem has left me slightly confused. For a friend you seem rather unsupportive. You make it very clear that you cared about this person, and yet the only reason you give for wanting her to live is for your own comfort. You give us the appearance of having no regard for her feelings. If you want to progress to a higher caliber of writing, you need to be able to express your true friendship and care for this person more than just in relation to your own wellbeing. Were you to do that, you would be able to surpass this “good” poetry easily. Furthermore, I would, with all due respect, suggest that you rethink the endings of the lines. It is difficult to discern weather or not there is a rhyme scheme, and although it may have been unintentional, it nevertheless reflects on your work. “True” and “you” rhyme as do “be” and “me”. Unfortunately, the absence of this continuing pattern throughout the work gives the impression of a half-completed poem, which this in clearly not. Were you to clear up these minor flaws, I can say with little to no uncertainty that this work would be elevated to a new level.

And I'm not allowed to cry? You're mean! Mean writer, good poem. : )

this is a very good poem. short, sweet, and i can feel the emotion flowing from it. good job.