Ok, let me see if school is actually effective in devolping literary sense...Can I go through the story? This is my view, it may differ.

1. Demons, otherwise known as those working in a mourge. They want to take her, but the mother won't let them.

2. The child is actually dead, both inside and outside. Yet the mother, the vessal that nutured her still held it back like a treasure

3. The flower, child, desperately wants to get out of her safe home to the world outside. Unfortunately, the kid doesn't know better and the mother is trying desperately to keep her in...but doing so she almost breaks down as her child kept on struggling. Rebelious.

4. In midst of rage in dealing with a rebelious nut, she strangled (I mean literally kill...c'mon, we saw some of this in the papers right?) the poor thing.

5. In the result of snapping and 'strangling' the delinquent, she is no longer there. Why? All because the kid wants to go out and have fun.

6. The last stanza states the extreme side of overprotectiveness, where a parent kills the child accidentally just because they love them so much. Because the mother cared for the child, she can't bear to see her child so something wrong. However...the end was drastic.

Phew, somewhere at the end words start floating away. Anyways, here's my two cents :).

Keep writing :)

Again, creepily effective. Very well written. Very, very, very well written. Very, very...well, you get my drift.

Short but sweet, very nice. Interesting metaphors, lovely diction, fantastic word choices and the rhyme scheme works well. Tell me, are you feeling "choked" by your parents? hmm? Is this a metaphor for you own underlying angst?
Please share, I'm all ears.

Wow, reading you poems can really expend my vocab..lol. Always a pleasure reading your stuff. Keep in touch k?
Sal

I realize my last review was a bit incoherent and too emotional.
The metaphor is unique and the rhythm and rhyme okay. I especially like the contradictions in each 'stanza' such as "stand up to the world/her brown leaves curled". I like how the imagery is not too flamboyant, but we can see how petals could represent the child's will to live or her leaves and whether they're out proud or curling to mean her personality...
It's an interesting way of addressing the conflict between mother and daughter and bringing it to light. It's got regular structure and the way of having the two lines have "your/you" and the last being "her" something after each "Flower pot".
I know this is getting too analytical. We're doing poetry in English right now so I'm in that mindset right now. Heh heh. I do hope you won't mind if I print this out and give it to Mr. Born (yep, that's his name) to start a discussion in class.
For all this review is technical, I find this poem powerful, like most of your others. Write on, Noah!
Izzy J.

Hi! Oh I like this a lot! It's a splendid metaphore! And the rhymes are beautiful and the flow too...the imagery is OK... anyway I loved the metaphore most of all...I think my mother is like a flower pot...lol. Anyway great poem! And brilliant conclusion in the end! Love, Mia

*breathing out slowly*
This really touches me and I like the..metaphor. Well done. Well done, Noah...
Izzy J.

mr, nazim... it's sad. the poem, i mean.
you come up with the most original ways to portray whatever needs to be said.
was that a tear i found gliding down my cheek?
you have a great ability to write.
nice piece of work, this.
hope to read more. it's addictive. or rather, you're addictive.
bless.
-love, enat

This is awesome! I like the objects that you chose to represent your 'characters' (for lack of better words)
I think it brings more out of, what some people call, the situation than it does when it is told bluntly. GREAT!

Aw, so sad at the end. It was a wonderful poem none the less, and it was very enjoyable to read.