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Shadows Fury 2005-02-02 . chapter 2
A HA! Another chapter! Hehehe...yea I'm a little tired at the moment...hehehe...anyways this was another well done chapter. And another intersting character, this Ramiel person. Hm...what's his story? Good chapter...yup...please update soon. Your a talented writer...hehehe ^_^ Later!
Shadows Fury 2005-02-02 . chapter 1
Oh...I came across this and I had to read it. I absolutely love the characters so far. Their names are so unique and original. *Sighs* I always have trouble with that...o well. Anyways, I like Plami. She reminds me of one of my friends. *Grins* the whole outburst at Illuminaire and then she goes al quiet...hehehe...I liked that. Well, all in all a very cool fic and a it's got a nice flow with the dialogue. *Bounces up and down* Off to read the next chapter. See YA! ^_^
Arisa Takemura 2005-02-01 . chapter 2
Oh my, don't think my rant was directed at you! I just submitted and was like, "Oh man, Sienna is going to think I'm upset w/them!" No way! I think I was going though your stuff and read a review that just sat with me the wrong way. It was meant to be encouraging TO you, not demeaning, I promise! ANYWAY, I have to get back to reading this chapter, because I haven't finished. I like what I have read so far though! And contrary to what you said, I think you are a great writer!
Arisa Takemura 2005-02-01 . chapter 1
I was going to review your first story on your list again, but then I felt the urge to read this one. I haven't gone though the whole thing yet, just the first chapter but I thought I would stop and give a review.

First of all, the names of the characters appealed to me. If I gave my characters cool names like that, I would keep forgetting how to spell them, and then I would get chewed out for mispelling their names. ^_^

I don't know if I've told you this before but I really like your dialogue. It flows very well. I would add in things I think you should change, but I don't feel like you need to change anything. Maybe it's just me, but everyone has their own writing styles. I don't think a person can strive to be 'perfect', because no one is going to be able to write something that EVERYONE likes.

I apologize, but I do get annoyed when some people review saying you should change such and such. If, say, I didn't like something, I would offer a suggestion on how I would write it, but I respect the author enough to let them write how they want, neh?

Honestly, I don't know what set me off, really. But I do know that I liked this, and I can't wait to read more. I am off to read the next chapter, and I hope to read more from you soon.

A small sidenote, Illuminaire makes me giggle. I mean, the name. It makes me think about the show, "Who wants to be a millionare." Maybe I am just crazy, yes?
The Failed Poet 2005-01-16 . chapter 2
Awesome! I love this fic! I get no part of it, but it's awesome anyway! Please continue onegaishimasu and don't leave your beloved Penny-chan in the dark!

Love,Pen-chan
Fieona 2004-04-09 . chapter 1
So cool!
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