 Shadows Fury 2005-02-02 . chapter 1Oh...I came across this and I had to read it. I absolutely love the characters so far. Their names are so unique and original. *Sighs* I always have trouble with that...o well. Anyways, I like Plami. She reminds me of one of my friends. *Grins* the whole outburst at Illuminaire and then she goes al quiet...hehehe...I liked that. Well, all in all a very cool fic and a it's got a nice flow with the dialogue. *Bounces up and down* Off to read the next chapter. See YA! ^_^ |
 Arisa Takemura 2005-02-01 . chapter 2Oh my, don't think my rant was directed at you! I just submitted and was like, "Oh man, Sienna is going to think I'm upset w/them!" No way! I think I was going though your stuff and read a review that just sat with me the wrong way. It was meant to be encouraging TO you, not demeaning, I promise! ANYWAY, I have to get back to reading this chapter, because I haven't finished. I like what I have read so far though! And contrary to what you said, I think you are a great writer! |
 Arisa Takemura 2005-02-01 . chapter 1I was going to review your first story on your list again, but then I felt the urge to read this one. I haven't gone though the whole thing yet, just the first chapter but I thought I would stop and give a review.
First of all, the names of the characters appealed to me. If I gave my characters cool names like that, I would keep forgetting how to spell them, and then I would get chewed out for mispelling their names. ^_^
I don't know if I've told you this before but I really like your dialogue. It flows very well. I would add in things I think you should change, but I don't feel like you need to change anything. Maybe it's just me, but everyone has their own writing styles. I don't think a person can strive to be 'perfect', because no one is going to be able to write something that EVERYONE likes.
I apologize, but I do get annoyed when some people review saying you should change such and such. If, say, I didn't like something, I would offer a suggestion on how I would write it, but I respect the author enough to let them write how they want, neh?
Honestly, I don't know what set me off, really. But I do know that I liked this, and I can't wait to read more. I am off to read the next chapter, and I hope to read more from you soon.
A small sidenote, Illuminaire makes me giggle. I mean, the name. It makes me think about the show, "Who wants to be a millionare." Maybe I am just crazy, yes? |