Beautiful! Your imagery and metaphors are very stirring. This wasn't written in meter, but the words you use create a sort of rhythm of their own. Good job!
-Linnet

This is really beautiful; I love your metaphoric comparisons... it makes your writing tangible and so much deeper. I wish I could write like you... keep it up!
~Ségolin

Nice work, def. came from the heart and your "inner self." Maybe you should remind that "inner self" that you were supposed to write a certain someone an email two weeks ago.
Keep writing.
-Seras