Nicely done, Ryn!
You forgot to get the vid from me, I realized that at Denny's when i went to pay.
Wait...your mom actually liked my stuff?
Oh, and look at the new review I got for "You tell me"

That was amazing, for the most part, the rhyming didn't seem forced and the poem flowed wonderfully. I loved this, especially where it went,
"Nobody cared about the little child who mourned her
And when she arrived in heaven, only his tears adorned her" Powerful lines. For that line where you noted it was a cheap rhyme, maybe you could use something like, "Nobody cared as her innocent blood dripped onto the cold concrete"? Just a suggestion. Keep up the great work!
~Lsay312