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| jessii 2006-11-20 ch 64, anon. | abusethis is amaziing. its probablly oneof the best storiiees ive eva read. u shood get it published.. |
| Amelia 2005-09-04 ch 64, anon. | abuseWhat an AMAZING story. |
| Casey Drake 2005-04-26 ch 64,  | abuseYAY! good ending! :) CD |
| Casey Drake 2005-04-07 ch 50, | abuseNO! :) CD |
| Casey Drake 2005-03-30 ch 47, | abuseo0o. more fun. if temil would realize it, he's truth. :) CD |
| Casey Drake 2005-03-14 ch 43, | abuseAAHH! evil people! you gotta save the good person from the brink of evil! or else... ok i slightly hyper. :) CD |
| Casey Drake 2005-03-10 ch 41, | abuseNO!I know the extra o's and exclamation points won't show, but there are *counts* 25 o's and thirteen exlamation points. ACH! How could you do this to me! o well. HE BETTER COME BACK! Grr. good chapters btw... :D CD |
| Casey Drake 2005-03-07 ch 32, | abusec'mon... save the ones who passed over! They can't all run away! NO! :) CD |
| Reda 2004-06-23 ch 2, | abuseOk that clears up the problem with the "break." strangely, i call them the same thing. where'd that come from? ^^ Anyway, I'm really enjoying it. So, Temil's part Taiken. Well, that's interesting. Later ~Reda~ |
| Reda 2004-06-23 ch 1, | abuseooh! Very nice. Verry nice with the suspense at the end there. (yes - I am one of those people that'll review whenever I feel like it, no matter how many chapters are up. There's no way I'd be able to remember all the things I want to point out). First, I don't know if you fixed this or not, but I'm gonna mention it anyway. When you change between time periods - like when someone lays down for the night and then they wake up in the morning - putting a little..um...something between those two times helps the readers to follow better (like dashes and such) Sometimes, putting just a space doesn't work because ficpress doesn't recognize it or...somethin' Anyway, and one more thing: my typical opinion is that the fire started a bit too fast. I mean...it could have gradually happened or something cause it's hard to believe a fire like that will just suddenly flare up and surround them like that. But enough of my comments. I got to go read more now. Great story so far. ^^ Later ~Reda~ |
| Karasu no sei 2004-05-28 ch 19, | abusehey! sorry i haven't reviewed in ages... it's really good, but i find it a little confusing. that's probably because i haven't read it in ages... >< anyway yeah it's great keep going! ~Karasu |
| umbrius 2004-05-21 ch 10, | abuseJOE & KYR: Ooh, a cliffhanger, well we're hanging on for dear life. JOE: Must. . .see. . .what. . .happens. . .next. |
| umbrius 2004-05-21 ch 9, | abuseJOE: Man my story seems pitiful. KYR: My god! My story sucks compared to yours. BOTH: HEY THAT'S WHAT I SAID! |
| umbrius 2004-05-21 ch 8, | abuseJOE: Friends can always offer comfort (I know that may sound gay coming from a guy, but nonetheless) KYR: You ARE gay, Joey. JOE: SHUT UP! KYR: He's too sensitive, anyway, I like this chapter too. JOE: Same here, your story is excellent. |
| umbrius 2004-05-20 ch 7, | abuseJOE:Great, I luv it. KYR:Must. . .resist . . .urge. . .to. . .rant, GAH: SHORT! YOUR CHAPTERS ARE TOO SHORT!! JOE:Feel better, Kyr? KYR:I have done a horrible thing, Joey, smack me. JOE:No. KYR:Come on, I just complained to one of our favorite authors, HIT ME! JOE: If you say so (Smacks Kyr) We both love your story, regardless of what Kyr says. |