this story is really detailed, but it doesnt quite make sense. I don't empathize with Rhian's predicament at all, because i don't know what in the world she is thinking, feeling, hoping will come out of this. I like the story's plot though, and I feel almost familiar with Rhian, like she is my friend.

I love it! This is such a great story. I read practically nonstop for 2 days to finish it, because it was so good. hehe...my mom kept asking why I was laughing so hard. I can't wait to read the sequel!

I like this so far!I will continue to read this soon but i can't now.

Anyway, I can't wait to find out what happens next.

*Nessa*

I love this thing!

This was a much better chapter than the first, I must admit. I hope it continues this way. And if it does, I'm really sorry about that other comment I said before. But you could have cut down on the emphasis, it gets quite annoying.

I'm not saying that this story is good, and I'm not saying it's that bad, either. I know I am only at Chapter 1, but I say that the first chapters speak for themselves. I will continue reading, for the pure fact that I have nothing else to do. I guess your name really does imply about how you write. Uh... sorry, anyway, you'll probably get better as you write. Most people are like that. But I'm the one to follow my advice since I am still child-like and all. Ok, well, I hope your writing career moves along and that you continue to improve.

Hi there. I really love your story. I haven't finished it yet, but I got to chapter nine and so far it is hilarious and sweet. I enjoy your humor immensley! It reminds me of me! Ha!. Well Anyway I just wanted you to know that so far this story is excellent. I love how you slip in humor in the most serious of situations, it keeps things really interesting!
I hope you have a chance to read one of mine as soon as I put it up. My username is TheGreatSavvy, and I should have my story up asap! Thanks for listening, and I hope to read some more of your stories!

it is so good.i was laghing for 2 hours.

Rabbits! Evil beings them. I couldn't agree more! Anyways, WOW nice work. Its funny while maintaining a sort of sense of reality.

this is such a good story! it's so funny! i would've laughed heaps cept i cant because i have a stupid sore throat and if i laugh i go into a coughing fit. but still. its really funny! i think ill go read the sequel now...

This was really funny, but a tad confusing... Still, good story!

wow!
great story!

I'm glad that you're one of the few authors who actually proofread their work. There weren't many grammatical errors, but the plot needs to be worked on. There really wasn't much of a plot if you take some time to read the story again. Nolan was completely useless as a character and kissing Nolan to prove that Rhian loved Gavin does not make sense at all. If she kissed Nolan, that would already imply she liked Nolan and not Gavin. So why would he change back to Gavin after that? Rhian as a character is quite annoying. Her witty remarks and endless chatter seemed a bit too much and cheesy. What I thought would be a humourous story did not make me laugh at all throughout the 17 chapters. Also, a couple of chapters around chapter 10 have the really long divider line that stretches the document and I had to copy and paste the story into a word processor so I wouldn't have to scroll horizontally every line to read it. Although the story was a bit annoying, somehow, I did not turn away from it. Keep up the good work! :)

If the rain forest has no rain than is it just a forest or does it become a jungle. Or do the bees really fly in the ocean or is that just the ants? Many questions have been unanswered in many people's mind.

That was an excellent story! I'm gonna go read the sequel! I also enjoyed the the bonus chapter, it was well written! : )