The dialogue is very natural, and the end makes you go O_o, "What happened?!" Very creepy and surreal.

Creepy...But awesome, leaves the reader to come up with their own conclusion

You really outdid yourself here with this story. You have a very dark voice with this one, but from a very young perspective. I noticed that when you read around my diary-x journal, that inspired you to write out something from a dream. I was hoping that I would influence others to play around with their dreams, and with this story seems I did just that. A young voice taking on an older style, send this one along to Terry Vinson. Tell him who influenced you to write this.

Hello Spade-
Dark writing here. Must have been some horrifying nightmare. I can see you put some nice effert into it. Good work!