ok mistic author... where is chapter 6? finish this story, and then go back and revise it. That's how I make my storiessatifsy

Just read the whole thing, not that hard seeing as how small it is (no offence) but I do love it.. It is a tad humorous and yet written in an angsty way which is quite a hard thing to accomplish... All in all I liked it, a lot and will be eagerly waiting for chapter five... Hope you dont take too long.

Look, a second review! Feel lucky. Anyway, I thought this story had a surprising number of similarities with Holes, except that Sara doesn't have any friends yet. Anyway, I'm curious, I assume she goes into the woods to play her flute and either it's a zen experience or she has magical powers or something. How will she deal with this camp? Is it simply enduring the brainwashing, or will it all come to a head and Sara will have to put herself in direct opposition to perceived authority? Will there be a love interest(everybody loves a love interest)? Are you sure you want a hole in the floor big enough to fall through? Maybe it should require moving a board or something, or not, whatever. Good stuff, keep writing.Varion

update, update, update. (even though I haven't updated mine in like a month, I'm gonna update sometime this week)

An interesting story! Keep up your good work!

Yipee, a new chapter! Hmm, I’m gonna need some new happy exclamations soon, I’m running out. A few comments:
Paragraph one: when you say ”found a camp”, I know you mean like start one, but it makes me think ”oh, look, it’s a camp! I found a camp!” So maybe you could change it to something like build or open or something.
Also, the sentence ”three bags-two at her sides and one on her back” sounds funny. Three bags what? You need a verb in there somewhere. How about ”she made sure she had all three of her bags...”
Lastly, I think you can just put “heading who knows where” without the dash. Makes it less choppy.
Paragraph the last (I got that from Huck Finn):I would say “after a bomb hit it“ to make it a bit clearer. You don’t need to, it’s just my preference.
Yay, this is great! Thanx for using my name. ^_^ Cornelia just sounds like a bully name (again, no offense to any Cornelias out there). The only question I had was about the last sentence, namely is it a real magic-tyoe premonition, or is she just imagining cause of her scary simile? But I assume we’ll find out soon. Keep up the good work!

Hiya AA, I’m too lazy to log in. I would call chapter one something like ‘preparation’ or ’departure’ or something that lets you know it’s a beginning, and that she goes somewhere. The second chappie could be called ‘Camp Life’, acuse all it is is a description of life at camp. Yeah, you don’t have to use these if you don’t want. keep up the good work! ^_^

Hey! I'm a flute player too, lol. Anyways, I like ur story and wanna know what happens next, so plz update soon! : )

Hi! I normally name my chapters according to what happens in them. But something simple, e.g. 'packing' for your first chapter. But no, that's sounds dumb...
Let's see...magic flute? How about Sara can create things when she plays her flute. Or, she can manipulate people's moods. And then there has to be something with the "in" crowd annoying her; or maybe something with the younger kids who love her.
I love adventures, but that's just me. They don't have to go anywhere at all. They can...umm...save the camp, maybe? Or meddle with the administration? (Obviously, it's not very good if it puts Sara in the 'special/problem' bunk.) Hope you like my ideas! ^_^

Hi! I am soo glad you haven't flamed me yet! ^_^ Actually, this is the first of a while that I've gotten onto fictionpress, so you're getting priority reviewing. (does that make sense?) Anyway, I hope you like constructive critism b/c that's about all I give! (Well, I also tell you if I like your work and why ^_^) Here we go...
Line 3: add 's' at end of 'pack'
Last paragraph (or so): You didn't say that Mrs. Tipony was Sara's mom's name before now, so I had to reread it a couple of times to understand. Also, is Mrs. Tipony someone important in the camp or are you going to tell us that later along with some surprise or another?
Actually, I love your start! Sara sounds like the kind of person I would like.

Hiya AA. I recommended you to Ancamna so if she doesn't review you, you can go flame her. No! Just joking! Don't really, she'd kill me. Sigh. -_-
Oh, yeah, the story? Right, it was cool. Not much to cemment on, just a *nyahh* to Mr. Writer's Block (he sure shows up a lot). The mean girl should be named Cornelia (no offense to any Cornelias out there). You have to explain more about the flute. It's magic, right? So it has powers. So come up with a situation where those powers are needed and have her use it! There, done. OK, so I'm not helpful, so sue me. bye bye

Hiya AA. Yay, et another story! They just keep coming, don’t they? ^_^ So, constructive critique:
paragraph 3, line 1: ’packs too many...’
what’s a broomstick skirt? I’m guessing something long and black...
Aww, poor sarah. I feel her pain. And HOW do you do italics? It would really help my stories if you told me!!

Wow. I wonder what made the person put sara in the SPECIAL bunk. W00t, keep writing.