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writergurlLW 2006-09-06 ch 2,	abuseAfter I did my last review I realized you did another chapter! it was nice indeed. Wil she fall in love with the slave? Oh, spicy.
writergurlLW 2006-09-06 ch 1,	abuseThis was actually a great story and I wish you would continue with it. The only problem is how bunched up you have the words and paragraphs but who cares, the story's good!
Firestarter911 2005-05-10 ch 2,	abuseHeh...the food one? Despite that one typo, this was awesome. I love drow, and your character is interesting, so please update again, soon!
BillyBobJoe the girl 2005-05-10 ch 2, anon.	abuseThis is good! But please, will Ardawain and Tamakir please leave that horrible place. I dislike prejudices, and Tamakir seems interesting, so maybe Ardawain could be banished and, as a last request, ask to take the human with her.
giulia elisabetta 2004-06-24 ch 1,	abuseThis was great too! I love your writing; characters and descriptions alike. I know that helpful reviews are supposed to point out things you liked/didn't like about the story...but I am so incredibly tired right now, all I can think of to say is that I loved it. (sorry I'm not elaborating!) I read your bio too. I love fantasy too, and agree with your view of romance. Ugh...most of the time. Um..think think... I am not very familiar with Dungeons and Dragons, but it sounds rather interesting, as I love most anything relating to fantasy. And dragons. =) Well, I will definitely continue to read your writing, although I'm leaving for the next seven weeks and will be without internet service, which should be interesting, so I'll have to wait until I get back to read more. Keep writing though, it's great! ~Kame
Elexies 2004-06-14 ch 1, anon.	abuseI looked at this and though 'oh god, a story about some amazing beautiful and perfect Drow female that's also overly badass, it's like a Mary Sue.' I was pleasantly wrong. This was delightfully written out and I could actually feel anger as I read through it. All I wanted to do was yell at her mother or Sanret and scream how she could beat any of their asses. Very, very good of you and this has wonderful potential. To not worry yourself with problems of what should be on Ff.net and Fp.net you could easily change the name and the landscape. Then there are no problems and little to no complaints. I think you are a talented writer, what I wish of you now is to work on discrption. What does Ardawain look like? What about Sanret? It's fun to just daydream and what not but sometimes it's better to add a rather detailed discpription of each character and can be a releif to some readers. Other than that this was nicely done and I'm very pleased with how you've written this out. Instead of Ardawain being a dominatrix, exceptionally beautiful, and dangerous with a weapon she's more like a girl striving for acceptance in a cruel world. Something most of us can relate to. Very good. ~Elexies
Michelle Munoz 2004-04-27 ch 2,	abuseSao: sighs And here I was hoping that she would have at least somehow gotten herself to at least THINk about apologizing. Anni: I guess that was too much too hope for. Ah well, one can only wish. Sao: Yeah, but this one is really impatient for the next part huge grin :D Anni: Although, you don't have to turn it out too soon, since we have to catch up on a few other stuff (as you might have noticed in your other story ^_^), so we could use the time. ~Sao & Anni
Michelle Munoz 2004-04-22 ch 1,	abuseSao: Me like, very much. Anni: Yeah. But Ardawain is a hypocrit. She doesn't like the way she's treated, but she's okay with treating humans and other races as if they're beneath her. Sao: We'd talk more, but lots of reading to do (as you may have noticed) so we've got to run. Ciao! ~Sao & Anni
Kraehe 2004-04-16 ch 1,	abuseHi! Great story! I have submitted some things that are loosely based on Faerun too... So far, nothing has happened and I have never claimed to own them. I like Fictionpress better too! Its also kind of ironic that I am also working on a story revolving around a half-drow trying to fit in... Anyways, back to the story. I liked it overall. I would love to know more about the characters, especially Ardawain. I look forward to a new chapter.

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